Peyton Heart's Blog
March 11, 2013
Another trip to our Shadowlands
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Unsure if he will find his friend, Ratio decides to take this chance and go it alone. He wants to get out from Valkan shadow once and for all. "Time to do it my own way, I don’t need Valkan to tell me what to do! “He says out loud. He decides to change his path and goes in a totally different direction than what they were heading in." I don’t have to follow his path now he isn't here! “Ratio starts to feel like he can do anything since he has a "Valkan sword" as well as his own. He was forgetting that only Valkan can wield his sword and harness its true energy. Always hearing from Valkan how easy he is to be misled and finally being sick and tired of reminded to always wear his blindfold, Ratio scoffs and decides to take it off and trust what his own eye see for once.
As he walks along the path, he notices things seem to get darker and even gloomier. He brushes it aside, He senses being more heightened and needing to adjust his senses too surroundings again. Thinking of nothing but moving shadows and noises from behind him Ratio moves on but on edge trying to act as strong as his friend but his insides were betraying him. Everything around him twists and bends changing his own reality into a nightmare. Things he thinks is stable seem to crumble in his hand and things that he thought were surreal seem to be there before him Ratio has never been known to trust what he sees and now faces his ultimate test of faith in his own ability of judgment, without his blindfold he reaches down to pick up what he thinks is a piece of fruit that would help fight his hunger. Ratio decides to take a bite to satiate his hunger and just at that moment he drops it his knees as he sees what he can’t believe is real or not. A mocking voice laughs at him saying “Foolish mortal, you think you can compete with me ha-ha" then fades to the mist as fast as it came.
Looking around him, he doesn't see anything; he doesn’t understand where the voice came from and what it meant. He decides to keep not trust anything now. Ratio moves on, hungrier but not wanting to try to eat, his vision blurring with each step. His sense of reality is demising with each movement of his young body. Everything around him seems to move and shift like moving shadows... Echoes mock him, and seem to laugh, but when he looks, nothing is there. "Oh crap, what is this place he says to himself?" Still wondering if he should follow his best friend's advice and put his blindfold on or not, Ratio still decides against it. He moves along the crack ground with each sound seeming to be louder and louder. Whispers dance around him, teasing him, and showing him things he has never seen before. Valleys of green, lush plants and trees with fruits of every kind are everywhere. He recalls what happened last time, but Ratio is starving while the whispers keeping telling him to eat and trust himself. He rushes forward and picks some tropical fruit from the trees, and berries off of the bushes then he sits down and starts eating. As he eats, Ratio suddenly finds himself feeling drowsy as a long black snake slithers up and looks him in the eye. The snake snickers, ministering at him, as he slithers away leaving saying "enjoy your dreams Ratio. He he..."
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As I sat on the bank drinking the water a faint voice calls to me " this is not who you truly are “She looks around in wonderment, confused and dazed not knowing what the voice meant “This is who I am it? I have always been like this how can I be anything else?" She thinks to herself as her sight blur a figure unlike she has ever seen slowly fades into the mist. A tall figure with dark black hair over his eyes with a mark on his forehead slowly approaches with a charming smile "Well hello there, can I be any help" oh I am not sure, where I am or what this place is?" looking deep into his eyes I feels myself being drawn into them as embody slumps this mysterious figure picks me up and disappears with into the mist. Waking briefly I barely see a desolate and barren place where lightning is heard and seen almost all the time. My eyes still slightly ajar looks up into his pure white entrancing eyes "where are you taking me?" she says but all he does is puts a finger on her lips and says "shush don't worry for now" As i fall back into unconsciousness" As he walks with her in his arms the fog and mist just part as he approaches... Kurai can’t seem to stop looking down at her "why is this stranger affecting me so , I am in control of everything around here but for this strange reason I feel so drawn to her beauty and strength, no impossible I am Kurai and this is my domain" he says to himself.
As I sleeps the surrounding and even certain things about Kurai change. His horns and wings disappear and a mark appears on his left shoulder... His house that was gloomy and dreary, dank and dank smelt like sulfur has also changed into a pleasant scent of roses in the room... Days pass into nights without her even noticing, surrounds grow into a beautiful garden full of roses with a small inlet with a water fall behind it. Kurai stands watch to make sure she is looked after but cannot understand why he feels drawn to her. "She is nothing to me just some stranger who has wandered into my domain. Bah “he says to himself. “Why won’t she wake up so i can find who she is and what she is doing here? He paces anxiously then hears a murmur of a whisper as he moves closer to her she reaches out without realizing and takes his hand and brings him down to her while she sleeps so he is beside her with his arms around her. For someone as Kurai this is new and he is out of his element but goes along with it. "Uggh i dont like this I am so nervous I am not in control" He suddenly feels himself feeling drowsy and falls into slumber. Days pass into nights without her even noticing, around the house and a garden grows full of beautiful roses with a small inlet with a water fall behind it. Kurai stands watch and makes sure everything is looked after but cannot understand why he feels drawn to her "she is nothing to me just some stranger who has wandered into my domain. Bah “he says to himself. “Why won’t she wake up so i can find who she is and what she is doing here? He paces anxiously then hears a murmur of a whisper as he moves closer to her she reaches out without realizing and takes his hand and brings him down to her while she sleeps so he is beside her with his arms around her. For someone as Kurai this is new and he is out of his element but goes along with it. "UGu I don’t like this I am so nervous I am not in control" He sudden feels himself feeling drowsy and falls into slumber. During her sleep she tosses and turns and rolls over and her head goes on his chest and arm across his him. He struggles to get free as he is feeling so uncomfortable but then he thinks i can make her think i love her “to him as he grins silently. Oblivious to his diabolical plan for her, Gabriella sleeps on .Kurai somehow works on her dreams and manages to make it seem they are so at ease with each other.
As the sun first rays hit the room where I am sleeping I feels its warmth and am shocked to see the stranger beside her... She jumps from the bred in shock and surprise looks around at her surroundings "how did I get here?' she asks looking bewilderment and amazed. He smiles saying “I carried you when you passed out. You have been here for three days now." moving back a step saying that’s impossible... what this is place... who are you?" I ask with an uncertain look and voice... He smiles and says this is my home and you’re in my domain now and you are safe trust me" He smiles to her saying “I assure you my dear you are completely safe here.
He looks at her and takes her by the hand and asks " can you tell me your name my dear so I know what to call you" Gabrielle thinks to herself and wonders " my name is ... I can’t seem to remember for some reason" unbeknown to her while she was in the mist everything about her, her name, her past was slowly being replaced with shadows and mists. “Well now we can’t have you nameless, can we Kurai says " tell me what you think of the name Cari? “Gabriella thinks and nods. As she looks around she catches a scent of roses nearby "hmm they smell so nice, but there is a fragrance hasn’t smelt ever before" she comments as she wanders about feeling and examining her new surroundings she feels the softest whisper and a touch of a feather on her shoulder, she turns to see Kura standing behind her." I didn’t hear you come up behind me “she looks at the type of furniture and how they seem oddly out of time and place.
She ventures outside to where she sees all sorts of different varieties of roses known to grow and some that are never been seen...Care hears the gently splashing of the water fall and heads towards the crystal water of the inlet behind the his strange looking house She looks down at her tattered and torn out fit and wishes she could bath in the warm water and feel clean again.. Kura walks over with a towel and a new garment for her to wear “why not bathe and feel clean again my dear " he says putting the garments and towel on the green grassy bank and then leaves her to have privacy as she bathes in the water fall... While she bathes in the water and washes her hair with the berries and rinses herself under the waterfall enjoying herself, unknowing starts to hum a soft tune even Kuria can hear from inside his house. As the strange hypnotic tune wafts through the air and mixes with the sun’s rays it catches him unaware for a moment and he loses his concentration on his plan for her. Unbeknown to Cari Kurai is watching from the window beguiled at her beauty and innocence.....He has trouble getting the hypnotic tune out if his head and is drawn to the waterfall when she is unaware of his presence he quietly announces himself and asks if she minds if he joins her in the warm waters
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As Valkan comes through the other side of the vortex he looks for his friends but can’t see or hear him anywhere... “this is like nothing I have seen before" he says out loud to him. he looks down to find his sword is missing "oh that’s just great now I don’t have my sword I am defenseless in a place I have never been before and I have no clue what is out there" He looks around his surroundings , things look so different to him as they twist and turn with each breath he takes. His senses try cope with this new environment. The stench of decaying trees and putrid stench of a river of sulphur makes him cough and start gagging, he starts vomiting up from the vileness of everything around him. With the rotting atmosphere every time he touches something Valkan doubles over with pain the mist slowly works its inside his young virile body but something else much more stronger forces it out of him and he is able to keep going for now. Although slightly weakened from the mist and its affects he makes the effort to move on. Each step brings pain and hunger to his body but Valkan heart is stronger and he knows he must continue even if he doesn’t understand why or how come right now. He wonders what has become of his best friend and his own sword "that young fool better not try to use it" he says out loud to himself.
As the serpent slithers away from Ratio, his eyes start to close and falls into a deep slumber, where dreams follow after another all linking him to Valkans words about how inferior he is to his best friend... Ratio tosses and turns thinking to him even in dreams and slumber I can’t escape his stupid attitude and here I am saving his precious sword just for him. As he drifts back into slumber Ratio dreams of being able to wield the lightning blade itself and harness all of its power for him.
His dream starts out as he is in a clear blue lake holding the blade and swinging it around. For a split second he thinks he hears a voice a whisper of woman's reaching out to him and only him." This is the power of the blade “he says to himself. Feeling as though nothing can touch him now and thinking he understands the true power of Valkans blade as he wakes he cedes to try and wield it and use it for the first time ever. But unbeknown to him the blade can only be used by one with a true heart and pure soul and so when Ratio starts to swing the opposite starts to happen for him, things shoot out at him and try and tempt and corrupt and as he travels along it gets worse and worse... darker and darker until he sees a light and heads for sighing thinking it’s over.
He comes across two guys one with an eye patch over one and a dark broody guy with some strange looking markings on his body. As he approaches them they turn to each other and grin. Not knowing who what has set these two people in his path he continues and walks up to them and greets them. They nod and eye is blindfold and sword saying how it is a very interesting blade, challenging him to a two on one duel saying if he loses he hands over his blindfold, Ratio thinking how strange it is not to want the blade but agrees to the duel thinking he has the power behind him so he can’t lose They nod and eye is blindfold and sword saying how it is a very interesting blade, challenging him to a two on one duel saying if he loses he hands over his blindfold, Ratio thinking how strange it is not to want the blade but agrees to the duel thinking he has the power behind him so he can’t lose , Ratio accepts their challenge.. The two strangers mock him by bowing as they draw their own blades for a time Ratio feels he is holding his own but has no idea that the mist and the sword itself is drawing his strength away and he starts feeling weak and the other two hit him time and again, Ratio can’t understand why this is happening "I have the power of the blade why am I losing .. This isn’t happening," Blow after blow he feels it more and more until he finally drops his sword and falls over. The two ominous and sinister looking men walk over to him as he slumps holding his sides and introduce themselves as they laugh "my name is Nikoli Kirkland and this is a friend of mine Cutter we believe you have something for us Mr. Ratio Anchuu"
He can’t figure out how they know his name and all about hum. "Don’t try to figure us out or how we know about you just accept you lost and hand it over" He growls throwing blindfold at them. “Here I don’t know why you want this and not the sword but have it, I don’t need it anyway" Ratio says coughing up a bit of blood. Still not even realizing it is all three his blindfold being off, using the sword and being in the mist that is making him feel like this. He drags himself and uses the sword as a leaning stick to help him walk. Just as he is following a track he gets a weird feeling " That little know it all , Ratio has tried to use my blade and it has weakened its power now " Valkan cannot believe his own friend would do this to him, "I bet he hasn’t been wearing his blindfold either " he says shaking his head. Valkan walks along and hears something calling to him in a snickering cruel tone "you have lost already Valkan Alexander, now how do plan on winning this battle" Valkan screams are heard across the land ' I KNOW YOU AND I WILL WIN WITH OR WITHOUT MY BLADE “The sinister voice mocks him back just by laughing .
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Unsure if he will find his friend, Ratio decides to take this chance and go it alone. He wants to get out from Valkan shadow once and for all. "Time to do it my own way, I don’t need Valkan to tell me what to do! “He says out loud. He decides to change his path and goes in a totally different direction than what they were heading in." I don’t have to follow his path now he isn't here! “Ratio starts to feel like he can do anything since he has a "Valkan sword" as well as his own. He was forgetting that only Valkan can wield his sword and harness its true energy. Always hearing from Valkan how easy he is to be misled and finally being sick and tired of reminded to always wear his blindfold, Ratio scoffs and decides to take it off and trust what his own eye see for once.
As he walks along the path, he notices things seem to get darker and even gloomier. He brushes it aside, He senses being more heightened and needing to adjust his senses too surroundings again. Thinking of nothing but moving shadows and noises from behind him Ratio moves on but on edge trying to act as strong as his friend but his insides were betraying him. Everything around him twists and bends changing his own reality into a nightmare. Things he thinks is stable seem to crumble in his hand and things that he thought were surreal seem to be there before him Ratio has never been known to trust what he sees and now faces his ultimate test of faith in his own ability of judgment, without his blindfold he reaches down to pick up what he thinks is a piece of fruit that would help fight his hunger. Ratio decides to take a bite to satiate his hunger and just at that moment he drops it his knees as he sees what he can’t believe is real or not. A mocking voice laughs at him saying “Foolish mortal, you think you can compete with me ha-ha" then fades to the mist as fast as it came.
Looking around him, he doesn't see anything; he doesn’t understand where the voice came from and what it meant. He decides to keep not trust anything now. Ratio moves on, hungrier but not wanting to try to eat, his vision blurring with each step. His sense of reality is demising with each movement of his young body. Everything around him seems to move and shift like moving shadows... Echoes mock him, and seem to laugh, but when he looks, nothing is there. "Oh crap, what is this place he says to himself?" Still wondering if he should follow his best friend's advice and put his blindfold on or not, Ratio still decides against it. He moves along the crack ground with each sound seeming to be louder and louder. Whispers dance around him, teasing him, and showing him things he has never seen before. Valleys of green, lush plants and trees with fruits of every kind are everywhere. He recalls what happened last time, but Ratio is starving while the whispers keeping telling him to eat and trust himself. He rushes forward and picks some tropical fruit from the trees, and berries off of the bushes then he sits down and starts eating. As he eats, Ratio suddenly finds himself feeling drowsy as a long black snake slithers up and looks him in the eye. The snake snickers, ministering at him, as he slithers away leaving saying "enjoy your dreams Ratio. He he..."
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As I sat on the bank drinking the water a faint voice calls to me " this is not who you truly are “She looks around in wonderment, confused and dazed not knowing what the voice meant “This is who I am it? I have always been like this how can I be anything else?" She thinks to herself as her sight blur a figure unlike she has ever seen slowly fades into the mist. A tall figure with dark black hair over his eyes with a mark on his forehead slowly approaches with a charming smile "Well hello there, can I be any help" oh I am not sure, where I am or what this place is?" looking deep into his eyes I feels myself being drawn into them as embody slumps this mysterious figure picks me up and disappears with into the mist. Waking briefly I barely see a desolate and barren place where lightning is heard and seen almost all the time. My eyes still slightly ajar looks up into his pure white entrancing eyes "where are you taking me?" she says but all he does is puts a finger on her lips and says "shush don't worry for now" As i fall back into unconsciousness" As he walks with her in his arms the fog and mist just part as he approaches... Kurai can’t seem to stop looking down at her "why is this stranger affecting me so , I am in control of everything around here but for this strange reason I feel so drawn to her beauty and strength, no impossible I am Kurai and this is my domain" he says to himself.
As I sleeps the surrounding and even certain things about Kurai change. His horns and wings disappear and a mark appears on his left shoulder... His house that was gloomy and dreary, dank and dank smelt like sulfur has also changed into a pleasant scent of roses in the room... Days pass into nights without her even noticing, surrounds grow into a beautiful garden full of roses with a small inlet with a water fall behind it. Kurai stands watch to make sure she is looked after but cannot understand why he feels drawn to her. "She is nothing to me just some stranger who has wandered into my domain. Bah “he says to himself. “Why won’t she wake up so i can find who she is and what she is doing here? He paces anxiously then hears a murmur of a whisper as he moves closer to her she reaches out without realizing and takes his hand and brings him down to her while she sleeps so he is beside her with his arms around her. For someone as Kurai this is new and he is out of his element but goes along with it. "Uggh i dont like this I am so nervous I am not in control" He suddenly feels himself feeling drowsy and falls into slumber. Days pass into nights without her even noticing, around the house and a garden grows full of beautiful roses with a small inlet with a water fall behind it. Kurai stands watch and makes sure everything is looked after but cannot understand why he feels drawn to her "she is nothing to me just some stranger who has wandered into my domain. Bah “he says to himself. “Why won’t she wake up so i can find who she is and what she is doing here? He paces anxiously then hears a murmur of a whisper as he moves closer to her she reaches out without realizing and takes his hand and brings him down to her while she sleeps so he is beside her with his arms around her. For someone as Kurai this is new and he is out of his element but goes along with it. "UGu I don’t like this I am so nervous I am not in control" He sudden feels himself feeling drowsy and falls into slumber. During her sleep she tosses and turns and rolls over and her head goes on his chest and arm across his him. He struggles to get free as he is feeling so uncomfortable but then he thinks i can make her think i love her “to him as he grins silently. Oblivious to his diabolical plan for her, Gabriella sleeps on .Kurai somehow works on her dreams and manages to make it seem they are so at ease with each other.
As the sun first rays hit the room where I am sleeping I feels its warmth and am shocked to see the stranger beside her... She jumps from the bred in shock and surprise looks around at her surroundings "how did I get here?' she asks looking bewilderment and amazed. He smiles saying “I carried you when you passed out. You have been here for three days now." moving back a step saying that’s impossible... what this is place... who are you?" I ask with an uncertain look and voice... He smiles and says this is my home and you’re in my domain now and you are safe trust me" He smiles to her saying “I assure you my dear you are completely safe here.
He looks at her and takes her by the hand and asks " can you tell me your name my dear so I know what to call you" Gabrielle thinks to herself and wonders " my name is ... I can’t seem to remember for some reason" unbeknown to her while she was in the mist everything about her, her name, her past was slowly being replaced with shadows and mists. “Well now we can’t have you nameless, can we Kurai says " tell me what you think of the name Cari? “Gabriella thinks and nods. As she looks around she catches a scent of roses nearby "hmm they smell so nice, but there is a fragrance hasn’t smelt ever before" she comments as she wanders about feeling and examining her new surroundings she feels the softest whisper and a touch of a feather on her shoulder, she turns to see Kura standing behind her." I didn’t hear you come up behind me “she looks at the type of furniture and how they seem oddly out of time and place.
She ventures outside to where she sees all sorts of different varieties of roses known to grow and some that are never been seen...Care hears the gently splashing of the water fall and heads towards the crystal water of the inlet behind the his strange looking house She looks down at her tattered and torn out fit and wishes she could bath in the warm water and feel clean again.. Kura walks over with a towel and a new garment for her to wear “why not bathe and feel clean again my dear " he says putting the garments and towel on the green grassy bank and then leaves her to have privacy as she bathes in the water fall... While she bathes in the water and washes her hair with the berries and rinses herself under the waterfall enjoying herself, unknowing starts to hum a soft tune even Kuria can hear from inside his house. As the strange hypnotic tune wafts through the air and mixes with the sun’s rays it catches him unaware for a moment and he loses his concentration on his plan for her. Unbeknown to Cari Kurai is watching from the window beguiled at her beauty and innocence.....He has trouble getting the hypnotic tune out if his head and is drawn to the waterfall when she is unaware of his presence he quietly announces himself and asks if she minds if he joins her in the warm waters
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As Valkan comes through the other side of the vortex he looks for his friends but can’t see or hear him anywhere... “this is like nothing I have seen before" he says out loud to him. he looks down to find his sword is missing "oh that’s just great now I don’t have my sword I am defenseless in a place I have never been before and I have no clue what is out there" He looks around his surroundings , things look so different to him as they twist and turn with each breath he takes. His senses try cope with this new environment. The stench of decaying trees and putrid stench of a river of sulphur makes him cough and start gagging, he starts vomiting up from the vileness of everything around him. With the rotting atmosphere every time he touches something Valkan doubles over with pain the mist slowly works its inside his young virile body but something else much more stronger forces it out of him and he is able to keep going for now. Although slightly weakened from the mist and its affects he makes the effort to move on. Each step brings pain and hunger to his body but Valkan heart is stronger and he knows he must continue even if he doesn’t understand why or how come right now. He wonders what has become of his best friend and his own sword "that young fool better not try to use it" he says out loud to himself.
As the serpent slithers away from Ratio, his eyes start to close and falls into a deep slumber, where dreams follow after another all linking him to Valkans words about how inferior he is to his best friend... Ratio tosses and turns thinking to him even in dreams and slumber I can’t escape his stupid attitude and here I am saving his precious sword just for him. As he drifts back into slumber Ratio dreams of being able to wield the lightning blade itself and harness all of its power for him.
His dream starts out as he is in a clear blue lake holding the blade and swinging it around. For a split second he thinks he hears a voice a whisper of woman's reaching out to him and only him." This is the power of the blade “he says to himself. Feeling as though nothing can touch him now and thinking he understands the true power of Valkans blade as he wakes he cedes to try and wield it and use it for the first time ever. But unbeknown to him the blade can only be used by one with a true heart and pure soul and so when Ratio starts to swing the opposite starts to happen for him, things shoot out at him and try and tempt and corrupt and as he travels along it gets worse and worse... darker and darker until he sees a light and heads for sighing thinking it’s over.
He comes across two guys one with an eye patch over one and a dark broody guy with some strange looking markings on his body. As he approaches them they turn to each other and grin. Not knowing who what has set these two people in his path he continues and walks up to them and greets them. They nod and eye is blindfold and sword saying how it is a very interesting blade, challenging him to a two on one duel saying if he loses he hands over his blindfold, Ratio thinking how strange it is not to want the blade but agrees to the duel thinking he has the power behind him so he can’t lose They nod and eye is blindfold and sword saying how it is a very interesting blade, challenging him to a two on one duel saying if he loses he hands over his blindfold, Ratio thinking how strange it is not to want the blade but agrees to the duel thinking he has the power behind him so he can’t lose , Ratio accepts their challenge.. The two strangers mock him by bowing as they draw their own blades for a time Ratio feels he is holding his own but has no idea that the mist and the sword itself is drawing his strength away and he starts feeling weak and the other two hit him time and again, Ratio can’t understand why this is happening "I have the power of the blade why am I losing .. This isn’t happening," Blow after blow he feels it more and more until he finally drops his sword and falls over. The two ominous and sinister looking men walk over to him as he slumps holding his sides and introduce themselves as they laugh "my name is Nikoli Kirkland and this is a friend of mine Cutter we believe you have something for us Mr. Ratio Anchuu"
He can’t figure out how they know his name and all about hum. "Don’t try to figure us out or how we know about you just accept you lost and hand it over" He growls throwing blindfold at them. “Here I don’t know why you want this and not the sword but have it, I don’t need it anyway" Ratio says coughing up a bit of blood. Still not even realizing it is all three his blindfold being off, using the sword and being in the mist that is making him feel like this. He drags himself and uses the sword as a leaning stick to help him walk. Just as he is following a track he gets a weird feeling " That little know it all , Ratio has tried to use my blade and it has weakened its power now " Valkan cannot believe his own friend would do this to him, "I bet he hasn’t been wearing his blindfold either " he says shaking his head. Valkan walks along and hears something calling to him in a snickering cruel tone "you have lost already Valkan Alexander, now how do plan on winning this battle" Valkan screams are heard across the land ' I KNOW YOU AND I WILL WIN WITH OR WITHOUT MY BLADE “The sinister voice mocks him back just by laughing .
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My Review of The Pirates Wife
I have just finished reading historical romance The Pirates Wife by Lynelle Clark
although not one for historical romacnes myself there were a few parts I did like
Set in the sixteen hundreds when pirates were plenty and plundered the sea
Rosa-lee and her mother's journey I found was very similiar ...
The way the author uses language of the time and describes this was well done
I was let down somewhat by how she took the same story line as her mother did
I did enjoy how their forbidden passion and love grew from unspoken glances ,
to their nights filled with passion it was very well described so that the reader could almost feel
what she was feeling..
I liked the twist in the end as well it was well done..
But I did feel the story in whole was a bit predictable for me...
People who do enjoy this type of setting and genre will love it though
although not one for historical romacnes myself there were a few parts I did like
Set in the sixteen hundreds when pirates were plenty and plundered the sea
Rosa-lee and her mother's journey I found was very similiar ...
The way the author uses language of the time and describes this was well done
I was let down somewhat by how she took the same story line as her mother did
I did enjoy how their forbidden passion and love grew from unspoken glances ,
to their nights filled with passion it was very well described so that the reader could almost feel
what she was feeling..
I liked the twist in the end as well it was well done..
But I did feel the story in whole was a bit predictable for me...
People who do enjoy this type of setting and genre will love it though
February 13, 2013
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SO WHY NOT INVEST IN THE ART AND LET YOUR HEART TAKE A JOURNEY BACK IN TIME TO WHEN YOU FELT THAT TINGLE OF YOUR FIRST KISS ALL OVER AGAIN
THANKS FOR BEING SO PATIENT AND LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK OF IT
PEYTON
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December 26, 2012
27/12/2012 A Christmas Of Wishes
Well this christmas was one full of ups and downs for me.. I thought I had my very first book contract and was so excited but the company was not so reputable.. so i thought i will stick with the self publishing for now and in the new year send out enquiry letters to literary agency first.. And then i found out I could have the book formatted for both print and ebooks for me by a online service company .. i will put their link up on my blog soon.. so once that is done i can put my book up for sale once more and have itlooking more professionally looking .. which is aload off my mind as i was having alot of problems with it and now with my arm being sore it was a huge relief for me as well .this is the link to the online service compnay they went out of the way to help me and when i do my others books i am going to use them as well..
http://www.facebook.com/#!/pages/Online-Services/365291750222325?fref=ts
I should have the book back up for sale very soon so I hope you will buy it and have a copy for yourself and please let me know what you think..
Thanks for reading and please feel free to leave me your thoughts and comments
Peyton
First Review
My first review from author
Robert Perry
I had the honour to review Poet Peyton Heart’s debut collection of works, and though no major poet myself, I really enjoyed the book. I found the poems to range from cheerful, hopeful and light, to morose and realistic. Present in every work was an energy and realism that could come only from life experiences. Heart includes a lot of herself in each work, something that adds to the emotional power of the collection overall.
When I first picked up her collection, I regarded it as a simple “love me, love me not” type of construction for love-struck fools. Forgive my candour, but I am a horror writer, and thus one with no proclivity for happiness and joy. What I found, however, was a compilation of poems that expressed the harsh realities of the emotional experience, and lightness of romanticism, as found in the bliss of union? Needless to say, I was surprised.
Heart’s poems seem to fall into two brackets; love, and despair (I especially liked the latter; see note above). Of the love category, each poem expressed sentiments ranging from youthful happiness to matured bliss. Heart writes about her life experiences, which forms a very realistic corps around each poem. I found there to be a lot of energy in some of her works. She speaks with evocative power, relating her own experiences and forcing to mind some personal memories of the reader. I found myself reflecting on many of her poems, my own mind wandering down loves old pathway.
Of the despair category, I found some darker places to hide. If part of Heart’s collection is light, then certainly the other half is dark. Here, Heart expressed the hidden sentiments of the tortured heart. Raw emotions, feelings of betrayal and desperation are all present in the works. Such works like “Loves Uncertainty” ring powerfully with lines like: “I was happy in a world of joy and laughter, then overnight- my heart was taken prisoner.” Some of the works have a sudden change, as expressed here, while others are built around the reactionary emotions, with the reader left to see what has happened, and not what is happening. I related more to these darker forms of poetry, as in them she captured what I consider to be one of the essential elements of gothic literature: the agony of despair. A few even have characteristic traits of the old gothic works. I was delighted to read these.
Heart has a simple vocabulary, but the stanzas are constructed so as to place emphasis on certain words, and thus force to the surface certain emotions. I was challenged on many occasions to face painful memories from my past. Sometimes, the words of her poems struck very dangerous cords; that is, however, the power of her work. It will make you face and feel your own memories.
There are only a few suggestions which can be offered to Heart in the form of a critique. First, I think she should learn and experiment with different styles of poetry, so as to use them as tools in her future projects. The collection seemed to follow the same vein. Try some rhyming, some narrative, and what other styles may be available. Second, I believe her work would benefit from an exploration outside the realm of love. Although replete with power itself, there are many avenues for emotional experience. Love it but one of many.
Peyton Heart drafted a good first edition compilation with her A Collection of Hearts. It is provocative, a work which will seemingly bless and haunt you. Take it and read it, but remember, when you have finished, Heart’s book will be your own memories.
December 15, 2012
Recent update 15.12.2012
After many efforts of doing the self publishing gig and having too many hassles and it being sole on demand plus no one knowing about it.. I have decided to try and get the book publsished and go mainsream..
Oh i know there is a chancee it can will get rejected but i have a list of publishers from wikipedia and once i finish redoing my poems i can and will be sending a letter to many publishing houses ..
but at the moment its an excruitating ten day wait to see if this first will publish my book for me ..
I am so excited plus nervous at the same time .. My friend and fellow author Robert Perry will be doing a review on my book and will have it up early next week so look for that as well to give you an idea of how good or bad my book is ...
I need to get back into writing shadowland desires as well which i really love writing about .
so thats it for now thanks for reading and following..
Peyton Heart,
Oh i know there is a chancee it can will get rejected but i have a list of publishers from wikipedia and once i finish redoing my poems i can and will be sending a letter to many publishing houses ..
but at the moment its an excruitating ten day wait to see if this first will publish my book for me ..
I am so excited plus nervous at the same time .. My friend and fellow author Robert Perry will be doing a review on my book and will have it up early next week so look for that as well to give you an idea of how good or bad my book is ...
I need to get back into writing shadowland desires as well which i really love writing about .
so thats it for now thanks for reading and following..
Peyton Heart,
December 13, 2012
A Brief Look Visit To The Shadowlands
My name is Gabriella this is my story, and my warning.
Open and read a story so dark with desire, lust and search for power if you dare… but be on your guard and never let it draw you in as it did the last one … For it will consume your soul and shatter your heart and dreams leaving you in a place so dark and empty full of echoes of your greatest mistakes ringing your ears, with your senses reeling, screaming out for answers.. Is this reality or illusion, what sort of nightmare you have stepped into
CHAPTER ONE: THE MIST OF DECEPTION
All around me is darkness as my dark brown eyes; try to search through the dense thick mist and darkness for any resemblance of light and a way out. The moment I stepped foot off my home, the guardians of Avalon, Angel and Ava the heart and soul fell into deep sadness and with it a dark mist silenced their beating hearts and froze their souls.
This place is nothing like what I was expecting, a cold chill sweeps through a me and , my heart feels heavy and suddenly feels so empty and hollow with each step I take in to the dense web of false truths and images. Unable to see the path ahead clearly I rely on my instincts in hope they will lead me to safety and somewhere to rest. For unbeknown to me with each step the darkness is drawing out any strength and guidance I have and is replacing it with lies and deceit that feels like it is real and true.
In a land far away two best friends are practicing their fighting skills. As close as brothers but so different in every way, Valkan dark and mysterious teasingly mocks his best friend as their swords he uses his other hand to brush his flame red away from his dark brooding eyes " Ratio my friend, you can do better than that" he jokingly says to him.
A swordsman as good as his mate but just not quite as good, Ratio has always felt under his shadow and second best. Ratio Anchuu a loner and doesn’t trust many, cold and calculating at times but both will do anything for each other.
Young and a bit rebellious “I’ll show you better “he says out aloud as he calmly puts on his blindfold that he has always used, both will do anything for each other. As they practice trying to best one another’s skills and swordsmanship laughing and enjoying the challenge .A haunting and mournful sound is heard at the same time as the moon goes blood red sending chills up and down Valkans spine ... He has only seen this happen in his nightmares and never knew what it meant. Ratio seeing the look in his friends eyes stops in his tracks as he starts to feel hollow inside , at the same moment of time they drop their swords and fall on their knees and scream out ."WHAT DOES THIS MEAN AND WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM US “not really knowing who they are screaming to.
Hoping to see a resemblance or glimmer of light in the distance I , try to scan the depths of mist surrounding but with each step a noise sound was made that made my bones chill and my nerves feel so raw. Every turn brought about excruciating sounds and images of a time long forgotten and long since buried.
As I try to make my way through the mist and fog I trip and falls on a root, putting my hand down to push myself up I feel a chill go through me and a something grab my arm, freezing afraid of what might be there but as I turns I see nothing but a fading figure, maniacally laughing echoing though echoing. "Did you think I could be forgotten so easily?" shaking with fright as every part of me goes numb as I shed a tear
All I hears are whispers and echoes of people and places, I know I must find a way out soon before it takes over my senses. But the deeper I go the more the mist twist and turn everything I believe in and know. Fears and nightmares seem to come alive in the mist torturing my mind and mocking me constantly.. As I stop and try to get my bearings but no matter where I turn everything looks the same, suddenly I feel my knees go weak and I fall feeling helpless and lost.
Ratio and Valkan feels something calling them ... Ratio places his blindfold back over his eyes reaches behind and ties it and picks up his swords, his two blades that have the join as one. ...his two swords are his hearts weapon for separately they are symbols of love and strength but when joined they are even stronger. Dark and mysterious Valkan picks up his long lightning blade that changes color but has yet to do .Valkans blade is unique in itself for only he can hold it and wield it. They look to each other and grin knowing how much their lives will change
Page 2
Lost in the heart of the mist I hear maddening cries calling out to me "you will never hide from then, they will find you and always hunt you down.. Shaking with fear and dread, my mind races trying to comprehend what it meant and who it meant by them. Memories fade; there is no sense of time around me. Figures and images dart in and out making me doubt my own sanity and decisions, Echoes of voices from the past mimic the ones in the present offering her guidance and hope from the despair of the mist. Not knowing what to trust any more, as I try to escape my clothes get snagged on a ragged branch of a rotting tree, eagerly I try to get free but the faster I go the more it gets tangled... "Oh what now, this seems hopeless, what am I going to do" I cry out loud. Figures and images dart in and out making her doubt herself and her decisions, Echoes of voices from the past mimic the ones in her present offering her guidance and hope from the despair of the mist.
Not knowing what to trust any more I close my eyes and seeks guidance from the ones I trust the most,, the angel of Avalon herself, for the first time all I can hear is silence as a tear. Wiping the tear away I start to wonder wonders what this means and why i am not able to hear them heart and soul of her home... Unbeknown, the two sisters have fallen into a deep slumber when the mist rolled over their home when the mist surrounded her and then froze the living heart of Avalon...
Without their love and guidance, I am starting to feel even more lost in a place trying to devour and torment my very being. As I see what looks like an exit I begin to runt of this dark and abysmal area, but in here it’s hard to tell night from day if it, or even just how long I have been in the mist. Seconds feel like hours stretching into decades. "Is it just a short while I've have been here or has it been longer? I really don’t know ". The mist seems to follow her with every step, no matter which path she takes fragments seep deep inside turning my thoughts and feelings around.
As I come to an end the what looks is a way out, a bolt of lightning breaks the mist show a bit of what I thinks is light so i start walking towards it seeing what is in front of me, I have entered one horrid nightmare into a place where the sky is bright and clear and a lake with crystal clear water " surely it will be safe enough for me if i drink from here , I am so thirsty " she thinks out loud as she bends down and scoops up a handful of innocent looking water and drinks .. Enjoying the coolness and refreshing taste of it not knowing what is it going to do.
Laughing and joking with each other Ratio and Valkan head off.
Deep inside himself he feels and hears the faintest hint of whisper, or is it just the breeze having some fun with his senses, it is something he has never felt before , an something that is so strong, that is pulling him and guiding him by itself and he has no will of his own..He turns on his heals searching for what could be making him feel this way.
Ratio stops and stretches with both hands on his blade and raising it behind himself with a bewildered look on his face.. "What’s wrong tired already Valkan?" Valkan turns to his friend "don’t you feel that ... Something pulling, I have can’t even describe what is feels like ... I have never felt it before. It is so immense and over whelming." Ratio shakes his head and shrugs and scoffs at his friend’s remark. "Whatever you say but I don’t feel anything, "Ratio replies as they start to move on again. As they walk for a bit they start to notice a single light glowing in the sky thinking nothing of it they walk on for a mile or so until Valkan sees another yet another one but this one seems to be moving as if it was following his every move, he tries to wipe away with his hand with a casual laugh and smile trying not to seem curious about it himself..The further they walked in the direction that are going Valkan couldn’t help but keep noticing the glowing moving lights in the night sky all moving around as if they were dancing but yet the closer they came to the source of the lights itself then they seemed to darken and almost go black as night. As they walk on further they come across what seems to a strange looking forest with a single glowing light in the darkness. Valkan drops his own swords and walks in by himself, not even his best friends voice as he calls out to him "Valkan what are you doing, what about your sword?" as he picks it and runs after him as he finally catches up he sees Valkan walk into what seems to like a vortex or porthole oblivious to everything around him, he reaches where Valkan was standing he sees his friend disappear into the vortex as it vanishes. Ratio looks around the area where his friend was but to no avail, to all it seems as though Valkan has just disappeared so Ratio decides to continue on in hope of catching up with his friend somewhere else. Ratio continues on his way not knowing if or when he will meet up with his friend again..In another part of time but still connected to where his friend is Valkan emerges from the vortex unaware of what he is come across now and what may lay ahead. Still thinking Ratio is behind him he calls “Ratio hurry up will you, I need my sword" but when he gets no reply he starts to get even more curious then as he turns around the vortex vanishes from sight, "great now how do I get back to where I was ?' he thinks to himself out loud. He decides to carry on and try and find a way back and out of where is he is. Valkan walks cautiously along surveying his new surrounding wishing for his trusty blade as he feels somewhat lost and alone without it.. From the time he stepped into this new place Valkan has sensed and felt despair all around him. There seemed no light or life. Destruction and decay lay abundant as far he can see ... death and decimation, the putrid stench of rotting corpses of flesh from those who dared to go further and failed.
December 7, 2012
This is a piece of poetry I have on my fan page tha...
This is a piece of poetry I have on my fan page that my friend and i put together the poem itself was inspired by a love of someone dear and will be going into my second book
I hope you enjoy reading about solar and Lunar and please feel free to to leave a comment and let me know what you think
Thanks again
Peyton
