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Jul 03, 2017 11:56AM
I love extended metaphor.
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Thank you :) you know , this has been shimmering in the back of my mind since last July . Writing is weird lol very mood dependent lol
"To drown their remaining children, don't look away now, that's the world we've created, not the world we were given, but everything's riven with possibilities now. It's the possibilities that kill us. Remember that."Open your eyes. No, I won't.
"What's a drop of fealty to an ocean."
On point.
"...to their deadened hearts' content."
Evoking memories of Pirates of the Caribbean: Dead Man's Chest.
"Those watery new songs will visit.."
They will stay with you.
"They'll struggle for that pleasure till the storm within the storms is quelled, quite so."
"And then this; a damp peripeteia a sudden wave, like the ocean is trying to tell us something."
It is. It is.
" It's like the whole sun has sunken under water..."
Enticing.
"A booming sound that's quickly becoming my favorite new song that's worthy. A new song.
But it keeps blasting.
Clarion. Clarion. Clarion. Sounds. Pounding in the rain. Despair, despair, despair."
Smiles, smiles, smiles.
"I hear the water roaring somewhere behind me. It's raging, protesting, want the best part of it back."
"I am still nowhere. It's not even blankness.
Jack Kerouac Alley, we were supposed to meet there."
So many broken promises, why do we even make.
"But something ate her up inside her."
You weren't there to see it, feel it.
"....but the sun hasn't died yet."
There's hope for you yet.
Haunting, disillusioning, metamorphosing.
Safa wrote: ""To drown their remaining children, don't look away now, that's the world we've created, not the world we were given, but everything's riven with possibilities now. It's the possibilities that kill..."Thank you !
The girl swimming in the ocean, I am sure you can tell who that was :)
Asghar wrote: "Safa wrote: ""To drown their remaining children, don't look away now, that's the world we've created, not the world we were given, but everything's riven with possibilities now. It's the possibilit..."Yellow hair and grey eyes.
Jerry wrote: "I love how your writing is slanting towards the weird more and more."Thank you !
You know, I had this song, this piece stuck in my head since 2016. For some reason I couldn't sit down and write it. Then in July 2017, I just sat down and did, writing it all down.
Words happen in such a weird way lol
Asghar wrote: "Words happen in such a weird way."Right? And sometimes you don't know what they mean till later.
Miriam wrote: "Asghar wrote: "Words happen in such a weird way."Right? And sometimes you don't know what they mean till later."
Oh, absolutely. I can't tell you just how many times I have started writing something and then end up writing something else entirely. It's a funny little life :) GoT ref lol



