Do beta readers keep saying, ‘I’m not in her head’ or, ‘this still feels distant,’? You’re not alone. This is by far the most difficult aspect of deep POV to put into practice. What if you learned how to transform character thoughts into forces of internal conflict that reveal personality, deepen emotion, and move the story forward?

The issue at hand then, becomes one of making the most of your character’s internal world. Instead of using the author voice (or the author speaking through the c...