I did a little experiment today with Jeremy’s Kiss.  When I first released the book I had the pitch on the back cover.  Later I changed the pitch and entered the book in a contest (sadly the pitch wasn’t good enough to get into the next round of the contest).

I was not able to tell which pitch was actually better though.

So I asked a friend who has a daughter who knows nothing about me at all (they live across the country) to read both pitches as if they were 2 different books and tell me whether or not she would be interested in reading the book.  Then which book she would prefer.

So my non-scientific experiment with an unbiased person indicated that I should be using the newer pitch.  I think I’ll keep it.