Are Adjectives and Adverbs Evil?

"During the whole of a dull, dark, and soundless day in the autumn of the year, when the clouds hung oppressively low in the heavens, I had been passing alone, on horseback, through a singularly dreary tract of country; and at length found myself, as the shades of the evening drew on, within view of the melancholy House of Usher." --Edgar Allen Poe, "The Fall of the House of Usher"

While there are rules in writing, each rule has exceptions. I agree with the dictum that in general it is best in writing to avoid adjectives and adverbs unless they are absolutely necessary. However, as the above quotation shows, a skilled writer such as Poe can use adjectives and adverbs to set a mood. Part of his skill is in his use of alliteration: "During the whole of a dull, dark, and soundless day..." The repetition of "d" sounds helps focus one's mind on the adjectives. The reader has a tendency to read the words, "dull, dark, and soundless" slowly and (to use an adverb) pondorously, so as to create a an atmosphere of decay and ruin. The words give me a feeling of suffocation. Lovecraft, like Poe, could use adjectives and adverbs effectively.

Yet such skill is rare. In ordinary writers, overuse of adjectives and adverbs can bore the reader. Unless they contribute to creating an image in the reader's mind, they are usually unhelpful in keeping a reader's interest. Most writers should focus on creating concrete imagery instead of using multiple adjectives and adverbs. A good image will stick with the reader far more than an ineffective use of modifiers.

What is especially grating is the use of adverbs in dialogue tags. In the phrase, "he said angrily," the adverb is unnecessary; instead the writer should make clear from the context that the speaker is angry: "He shook his fist and said,..." The reader then will pass over the word "said" as if it were not present and focus on the actual dialogue.

I have read good works with too many adverbial dialogue tags. Stephen King's Salem's Lot has quite a few, and I did not find them effective, though I like the book overall. Stephen Follett's great work, , uses too many adverbial dialogue tags. I do not know if writing in the UK has been as influenced by Hemingway as American writing, but Hemingway's advice on using few adjectives and adverbs remains sound.

This is not to say that one can avoid adjectives and adverbs altogether--that would make an awkward work. In horror fiction, which I write, they can be useful in establishing atmosphere in the tradition of Poe and Lovecraft. Adjectives and adverbs are neither evil or good per se As you write, read aloud a sentence and/or longer passages and determine whether the adjective or adverb works in that setting. If not, focus on creating concrete imagery.
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Published on February 03, 2015 07:25 Tags: adjectives, adverbs, creative-writing, imagery
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message 1: by Joe (last edited Feb 03, 2015 07:48AM) (new)

Joe Ulatowski A couple of thoughts regarding adjective and adverb use cross my mind from the example you provide above. First, "He said angrily" is far more parsimonious than "He shook..." If one can say something in a less convoluted way, then that's how the sentence ought to be framed. Second, "He shook his fist and said..." is ambiguous. It could be that he is angry, but it also could be that he is insulting someone. So, for these two reasons, I would opt for the "He said angrily" over the second option.

Adjective and adverb use can frustrate a reader. There's no doubt about that; however, far more offensive is the unnecessary use of prepositional phrases. Sentences could be cut by a third or more if people understood prepositional phrases were unnecessary. Do you have any opinions regarding prepositional phrases?


message 2: by Michael (new)

Michael You have a point--too many prepositional phrases can weaken prose and poetry. Of course the context of dialogue will be more than one sentence, and when it is clear that the character is angry from the larger context, I see no need for an adverb. My post did not use a good example of imagery. Of course there are times in which there may not be sufficient context to determine the mood of a character--and that is when adjectives and adverbs are appropriate.


message 3: by Joe (new)

Joe Ulatowski Excellent point, sir! Context should play an important role in deciding when to use certain phrasing. I've never had the knack of writing prose or poetry, though a colleague some years back told me that I should try my hand at it since I'm a reasonably good storyteller.

In prose and poetry, is parsimony, taking Ockham's infamous razor to one's writing, as critical as it is in academic writing? Perhaps that is what was motivating my last comment.


message 4: by Michael (new)

Michael Parsimony qua parsimony is not as important as every scene moving the action forward. Ideally, though rarely in actual works, each scene in a novel (and definintely in a short story) should advance the plot.


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