Reviews for the Literary Inclined discussion

Hey everyone! I was babysitting last night and needed something to do until the parents got home (the kids were asleep). So I started writing, and I think it has the potential for a good story. Right now, it's a very very very ROUGH DRAFT because I wrote it quickly and sleepily. It's five pages with no ending in sight, but I just want to know if you'll think that it's something to continue on with. Please comment below with an email address, and I'll send it to you! Send it back to me with comments, or just post a comment below here! Thanks all :)

The story is about a girl named Trinity who is a Cimmerian (rival species to humans) and a guy named Damon (I know, cliche) in a post apocalyptic world. Damon's supposed to bring her back to his rebellion camp, and Trinity's trying to find her family. I'll leave the rest up to you whether you want to read it or not. Remember, it's only five pages long, and I just want to know if you think it has enough potential to go on and be a real story.

Theoretically, anything can be made into a story with proper plotting and writing, so go ahead and shoot for the stars.

Thanks. I guess I just want to know if other people would read it...