Young Writers Group discussion

Is this where I write my writings Sarah?

Yeah it is! Post whatever you want here.

Danielle
It means playing,swimming,laughing ,
It is the number 13,
It is like the beautiful sunset,
It is going to Maine,
It is the memory of Mimi,
Who taught me to always be strong and don't give up,
When she needed help with therapy,
My name is Danielle,
It means I believe that everybody deserves some respect.

Marie Danielle
funny,playful,pretty,awesome
Sister of Emmanuelle,Claudane and Brother of Willie,Dylan Jay
Lover of sweets, the babysitter club books,parties
Who feels excited about school, wonderful about having a family, happy about soccer
Who needs tv to watch when I'm bored, sisters to play with and joke around, friends and family
Who gives presents for Christmas, love and care,smiles to people
Who fears earthquakes,spiders,being kidnapped
Who would like to see New York City,the Grand Canyon,a shark
Resident of the village of East Aurora, Girard Ave.
Brown-Cashdollar

This is the beginning of one my short story, so I wanted to see what you guys think about it. Please I don't care if you give me bad criticism.

Where I live, Inhumanness, it’s a place where anything could happen. I thought I already knew what my destiny was, but I was wrong. I had a way bigger destiny than I imagined. My destiny was connected to a lot of people destinies. But the day I found about my destiny it was also the day I found out I would have to sacrifice everything and everyone I love. But before I continue let me tell you it from the beginning when everything happened.