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Jun 09, 2009 08:17PM
ya i have. im wrighting a story called Amadaus.
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this is my series made into a story
Amazed
By: Maria A. Loya
this is my discription
“In the middle of the night he heard pounding…like hoof beats of a horse.”
Justin is a huge horse lover; he’s also a huge skeptic. He didn’t believe much at all. Whether it was from ghosts to fairies, he didn’t believe it. That was until Charcoal died. Charcoal had to be the best horse ever! After that it all went wrong. They couldn’t afford to keep there home, there animals, anything. Finally Justin decided to just run away. Run away and never see anyone again. But to his surprise he meets up with someone he’ll never forget.
Amazed
By: Maria A. Loya
this is my discription
“In the middle of the night he heard pounding…like hoof beats of a horse.”
Justin is a huge horse lover; he’s also a huge skeptic. He didn’t believe much at all. Whether it was from ghosts to fairies, he didn’t believe it. That was until Charcoal died. Charcoal had to be the best horse ever! After that it all went wrong. They couldn’t afford to keep there home, there animals, anything. Finally Justin decided to just run away. Run away and never see anyone again. But to his surprise he meets up with someone he’ll never forget.
Chapter 1)
My Miracle
Justin stared into the empty stall. When Charcoal died his mom had been promising him the horse she saw at a sale. His name was War Drum, a gorgeous stallion with his black and white paint coat but when the price went up his mom could not afford it!
“How can I live without my amazing mare!” thought Justin
Charcoal had a gray mane and dapple coat, she was simply a dream come true!
When he went to have lunch his mom and dad had some bad news.
“Justin, your mom and I have been talking and we think our mortgage is too high with the house, the stable and our huge piece of land.” Stated Justin’s dad
“What do you mean?” Justin asked looking puzzled
“Well…” Justin’s mom began
“We are considering selling the ranch and moving to Seattle.”
That night Justin got up at 11:30 and started packing. At midnight when he was done packing he ran away into the wild.
He was almost fully dehydrated when he reached the lake. He reached into his bag and pulled out a pot, tripod, and a chain. He started a fire, put the pot on, and started boiling water.
After he had a drink he set out to hunt. When he went out he heard something in the brush. He held up a spear, alert until a girl with long brown hair came out.
“Who are you?” Justin asked
“My name is Kindle, she said looking at him with majestic eyes.
Justin took Kindle back to his camp and told her to stay there until he got back with food.
But when Justin got back Kindle was not there.
“Kindle, Kindle!”
Justin yelled until he finally gave up and went to sleep. In the middle of the night he heard pounding…like hoof beats of a horse. He went out to see what was going on and when he stepped outside he saw Kindle riding a pure white mare!
“Whose horse is this?” Justin asked.
“Mine, this is Miracle. I have been looking for her, which is why I am here instead of at my camp.” Replied Kindle
That night Justin thought about everything that had happened and Kindle just may be an angel!
The next day Justin and Kindle had breakfast and Justin told Kindle the whole story of why he was out here.
“So…why are you out here?” asked Justin
“Well…I can’t say”
“Why?”
“It’s a secret”
“Oh” said Justin
“You must feel lucky having Miracle.” Justin said looking down with the eyes of a blood hound.
“What do you mean?” asked Kindle.
“My horse died” said Justin with a toned voice.
Kindle looked down, at Justin, and at Miracle
“How would you like to own Miracle?” asked Kindle
“But she’s yours.” Replied Justin, looking up at her.
“But you need her more then I do” said kindle smiling.
Kindle handed the reins to Justin and said
“Why don’t you take her out for a ride in the woods and get to know her?”
Justin took the reins and took her into the woods and went back to his house. His mom and dad were calling the police, and the spare stall was still empty, Justin set it up with water, grass and a small bed of straw, and then went back to tell Kindle he was going home.
My Miracle
Justin stared into the empty stall. When Charcoal died his mom had been promising him the horse she saw at a sale. His name was War Drum, a gorgeous stallion with his black and white paint coat but when the price went up his mom could not afford it!
“How can I live without my amazing mare!” thought Justin
Charcoal had a gray mane and dapple coat, she was simply a dream come true!
When he went to have lunch his mom and dad had some bad news.
“Justin, your mom and I have been talking and we think our mortgage is too high with the house, the stable and our huge piece of land.” Stated Justin’s dad
“What do you mean?” Justin asked looking puzzled
“Well…” Justin’s mom began
“We are considering selling the ranch and moving to Seattle.”
That night Justin got up at 11:30 and started packing. At midnight when he was done packing he ran away into the wild.
He was almost fully dehydrated when he reached the lake. He reached into his bag and pulled out a pot, tripod, and a chain. He started a fire, put the pot on, and started boiling water.
After he had a drink he set out to hunt. When he went out he heard something in the brush. He held up a spear, alert until a girl with long brown hair came out.
“Who are you?” Justin asked
“My name is Kindle, she said looking at him with majestic eyes.
Justin took Kindle back to his camp and told her to stay there until he got back with food.
But when Justin got back Kindle was not there.
“Kindle, Kindle!”
Justin yelled until he finally gave up and went to sleep. In the middle of the night he heard pounding…like hoof beats of a horse. He went out to see what was going on and when he stepped outside he saw Kindle riding a pure white mare!
“Whose horse is this?” Justin asked.
“Mine, this is Miracle. I have been looking for her, which is why I am here instead of at my camp.” Replied Kindle
That night Justin thought about everything that had happened and Kindle just may be an angel!
The next day Justin and Kindle had breakfast and Justin told Kindle the whole story of why he was out here.
“So…why are you out here?” asked Justin
“Well…I can’t say”
“Why?”
“It’s a secret”
“Oh” said Justin
“You must feel lucky having Miracle.” Justin said looking down with the eyes of a blood hound.
“What do you mean?” asked Kindle.
“My horse died” said Justin with a toned voice.
Kindle looked down, at Justin, and at Miracle
“How would you like to own Miracle?” asked Kindle
“But she’s yours.” Replied Justin, looking up at her.
“But you need her more then I do” said kindle smiling.
Kindle handed the reins to Justin and said
“Why don’t you take her out for a ride in the woods and get to know her?”
Justin took the reins and took her into the woods and went back to his house. His mom and dad were calling the police, and the spare stall was still empty, Justin set it up with water, grass and a small bed of straw, and then went back to tell Kindle he was going home.
Chapter 2)
Dear Savior
Justin rode Miracle back to the lake to tell Kindle that he was going home.
“So how was your ride?” asked Kindle
“Good” Justin said
“Anything happen”
“Well… something did happen” said Justin
“What?” she asked
“I have decided to go back home.”
Kindle looked down and said
“Ok but make sure that nobody finds her.”
“Why what will happen?”
“She was born a secret and I hope to keep her a secret.”
“Don’t worry I promise nobody will find out about her.”
Justin turned Miracle around and rode her about half a mile from his house and built a small stall were nobody would see her.
A few days later Justin came back only to find Miracle breathing heavily and lying down.
Justin, stunned with panic, quickly sat down next to her trying to figure out what was going on. He wanted to call a vet but he had to keep his promise to Kindle!
Finally, there was nothing to do but wait. And after a few
minutes there was a new member of the family. The colt stumbled and scrambled to his feet, but unlike Miracle he was black.
Justin went to sleep wondering what to name him. Spark? No Lucky? No. He went to sleep knowing he would decide later!
The next morning he went on a hike.
“Wow! What a view!”
He was looking around and he saw 2 wolves. He looked at them, they looked back… and started to charge! Justin ran, ran to home were he would be safe! But soon stumbled, the wolf would have killed him but the weirdest thing happened. The new colt came running in and scared them off! A true blessing! And then Justin knew his true name was Savior.
Justin led Savior back to his stall then went to bed and drifted asleep.
When he was sleeping he had a vision, the vision told him to find Miracle.
But Miracle was in her stall, right? He thought back to the last time he saw her… but that was 2 days ago!!!
Almost immediately he shot out of bed and ran to the stalls. When he got there the stall door was ajar and the stall empty. He knew there was no point looking for her in total darkness at 5:00 A.M in the woods, especially because his mom gets up and goes to work at 6:00 (and knowing her she will most likely try to wake him up for a kiss goodbye).
But when he went back to bed he had another vision of Miracle saying that she wasn’t being fed so she ran away. Then another vision of her being trapped by wolves! Could this be real? Could Miracle really be out there somewhere trapped by wolves? Justin couldn’t take a chance, he waited till his mom left and he went out to the secret stable he had built and got out Savior. He then realized that he had no idea were she was. So he took his dog Charter. Charter was a 4 star rescue dog that could find almost anything! So with that he set out, Charter leading the way.
After about 30 minutes he saw Miracle from a distance with a few cuts, bruises and a minor injury on her front left leg that looked like a bite wound, and various breeds of wolves circling her.
Justin knew what to do, he let Savior off lead and he charged amazingly scaring off all of the wolves!
Now all he had to do was take care of Miracle’s leg. He went to the stable, got some antiseptic and cleaned the wound.
The next day Justin went out to check on Miracle and Savior. Miracle greeted him with a whinny and a neigh, but from Savior, nothing not a whinny or neigh. He went to the stall with the door ajar…and Savior was gone!
Dear Savior
Justin rode Miracle back to the lake to tell Kindle that he was going home.
“So how was your ride?” asked Kindle
“Good” Justin said
“Anything happen”
“Well… something did happen” said Justin
“What?” she asked
“I have decided to go back home.”
Kindle looked down and said
“Ok but make sure that nobody finds her.”
“Why what will happen?”
“She was born a secret and I hope to keep her a secret.”
“Don’t worry I promise nobody will find out about her.”
Justin turned Miracle around and rode her about half a mile from his house and built a small stall were nobody would see her.
A few days later Justin came back only to find Miracle breathing heavily and lying down.
Justin, stunned with panic, quickly sat down next to her trying to figure out what was going on. He wanted to call a vet but he had to keep his promise to Kindle!
Finally, there was nothing to do but wait. And after a few
minutes there was a new member of the family. The colt stumbled and scrambled to his feet, but unlike Miracle he was black.
Justin went to sleep wondering what to name him. Spark? No Lucky? No. He went to sleep knowing he would decide later!
The next morning he went on a hike.
“Wow! What a view!”
He was looking around and he saw 2 wolves. He looked at them, they looked back… and started to charge! Justin ran, ran to home were he would be safe! But soon stumbled, the wolf would have killed him but the weirdest thing happened. The new colt came running in and scared them off! A true blessing! And then Justin knew his true name was Savior.
Justin led Savior back to his stall then went to bed and drifted asleep.
When he was sleeping he had a vision, the vision told him to find Miracle.
But Miracle was in her stall, right? He thought back to the last time he saw her… but that was 2 days ago!!!
Almost immediately he shot out of bed and ran to the stalls. When he got there the stall door was ajar and the stall empty. He knew there was no point looking for her in total darkness at 5:00 A.M in the woods, especially because his mom gets up and goes to work at 6:00 (and knowing her she will most likely try to wake him up for a kiss goodbye).
But when he went back to bed he had another vision of Miracle saying that she wasn’t being fed so she ran away. Then another vision of her being trapped by wolves! Could this be real? Could Miracle really be out there somewhere trapped by wolves? Justin couldn’t take a chance, he waited till his mom left and he went out to the secret stable he had built and got out Savior. He then realized that he had no idea were she was. So he took his dog Charter. Charter was a 4 star rescue dog that could find almost anything! So with that he set out, Charter leading the way.
After about 30 minutes he saw Miracle from a distance with a few cuts, bruises and a minor injury on her front left leg that looked like a bite wound, and various breeds of wolves circling her.
Justin knew what to do, he let Savior off lead and he charged amazingly scaring off all of the wolves!
Now all he had to do was take care of Miracle’s leg. He went to the stable, got some antiseptic and cleaned the wound.
The next day Justin went out to check on Miracle and Savior. Miracle greeted him with a whinny and a neigh, but from Savior, nothing not a whinny or neigh. He went to the stall with the door ajar…and Savior was gone!
Chapter 3)
Dark Angel
Justin got on Miracle and set out first looking in the place he had found Miracle before.
When he got there…nothing. But when we went about 3 miles north he saw Savior in sort of a cylinder but…the walls were made of what seemed like pure power! He went up to it, afraid to touch it but there was a note on it, he looked close and started to read:
Dear Justin,
I have put Savior in a chamber until you find the truth about Kindle, there is a secret behind her that you need to learn. I will be watching you so I will know the exact moment you learn, so I can set Savior free at the precise time.
- Anonymous
Justin stared at the note, his face full of sorrow and rage. He grabbed the note crushed it in his hands and threw it on the ground. He sat down covering his face with his hands not sure what to do. He figured that first he should talk to Kindle to find out this secret. He picked up the note and rode Miracle back to his old camp. Kindle was still there boiling what looked like venison.
“Hi Justin” Kindle said with her majestic voice
“Look Kindle I need to ask you a question.” Said Justin flatly
“Sure what?” responded Kindle
“Well…” started Justin
Justin handed her the note. Kindle read it, when she was done she held it in her hands and stared out to the distance.
“Well can you tell me the secret?” Justin asked
“Ok but…just don’t be scared” replied Kindle
“Ok” said Justin puzzled
“Ok well…”
“I think you have figured out that I am an angel right?” asked Kindle
“Well yeah” responded Justin.
“Ok, well…I’m not exactly a good angel”
“What do you mean?” asked Justin worried.
“I used to be a dark angle. But I have changed! Really!”
Justin stepped back in fear.
“Justin I have really changed, I got tired of serving evil, you have got to trust me!”
Shaking, Justin jumped on Miracle and rode off to the place to where Savior was. When he got there he jumped off and ran up to Savior, there was a note tied to his neck that said,
Dear Justin,
You have found out that Kindle was a dark angel but the thing is, she is still HALF a dark angle! Sometimes she gets possessed by evil spirits trying to get her back on there side. And I am sorry to tell you this but until you experience this and find a cure for it Savior will be contaminated by a life threatening disease, so you can either do nothing and let Savior die, or experience Kindle on her dark side and cure It, There is many possible cures. You must find at least one. Or let Savior go.
-Anonymous
Justin sighed and went to put Savior away. After he put Savior away he went to see Kindle again.
“Hi” started Justin
“Hey” kindle said with a half grin
“Can I sleep here for a few nights?” asked Justin
“Sure” kindle said
On the third night at about 6:00 Justin heard voices from kindle,
“I’ll never go”
“I will not betray Justin and the others”
“NEVER”
“you will be ours” another voice…an evil voice…from a demon.
Then something happened I can’t really explain, it’s like the demons were coming to Earth. Justin watched as Kindle seemed to wake up but possessed. It was happening, the demons were possessing Kindle! Justin wanted to do something but he knew he couldn’t in fear of something far worse than death, facing hell itself! Being taken by demons. A horrible pain that is felt forever.
Kindle stood up, eyes a dark red, demon eyes, then Justin decided on what to do.
Pray
Pray until the lord responded to his prayer.
Dear lord I pray to you to save Kindle from this horrible possession and to send demons back to hell and to never harm us again.
Amen
After the prayer all Justin could do was wait, wait until the lord responded. A few minutes passed and he saw a gold flare and what looked like a dove, after that Kindle fell to the ground and the flare of light left. Then kindle got up, luckily she had her own majestic eyes back.
“Kindle?” said Justin a bit shaky
“Look Justin it wasn’t me I was possessed!” said Kindle jumping right into the situation
“Look Kindle I know what happened, it’s ok.” said Justin.
Kindle smiled with a look of relief. Justin said goodbye to Kindle and rode back to Savior, he had another note around his neck that wrote:
Dear Justin,
You now know the secret of Kindle, the plan was just for you to LEARN about her, but you did more! Because you sent the prayer the demons will never harm Kindle again!
And now you deserve to know who we are,
-the angles above
Justin went back to see Kindle one last time,
“Hi” started Justin
“Justin, look thank you so much!” said Kindle
“Well I knew I needed to do something”
“Justin you don’t know how blessed I am to know you!”
“Well, I’m just an average boy”
“Justin, I may be the angle but you are the hero in my life.”
The End
Dark Angel
Justin got on Miracle and set out first looking in the place he had found Miracle before.
When he got there…nothing. But when we went about 3 miles north he saw Savior in sort of a cylinder but…the walls were made of what seemed like pure power! He went up to it, afraid to touch it but there was a note on it, he looked close and started to read:
Dear Justin,
I have put Savior in a chamber until you find the truth about Kindle, there is a secret behind her that you need to learn. I will be watching you so I will know the exact moment you learn, so I can set Savior free at the precise time.
- Anonymous
Justin stared at the note, his face full of sorrow and rage. He grabbed the note crushed it in his hands and threw it on the ground. He sat down covering his face with his hands not sure what to do. He figured that first he should talk to Kindle to find out this secret. He picked up the note and rode Miracle back to his old camp. Kindle was still there boiling what looked like venison.
“Hi Justin” Kindle said with her majestic voice
“Look Kindle I need to ask you a question.” Said Justin flatly
“Sure what?” responded Kindle
“Well…” started Justin
Justin handed her the note. Kindle read it, when she was done she held it in her hands and stared out to the distance.
“Well can you tell me the secret?” Justin asked
“Ok but…just don’t be scared” replied Kindle
“Ok” said Justin puzzled
“Ok well…”
“I think you have figured out that I am an angel right?” asked Kindle
“Well yeah” responded Justin.
“Ok, well…I’m not exactly a good angel”
“What do you mean?” asked Justin worried.
“I used to be a dark angle. But I have changed! Really!”
Justin stepped back in fear.
“Justin I have really changed, I got tired of serving evil, you have got to trust me!”
Shaking, Justin jumped on Miracle and rode off to the place to where Savior was. When he got there he jumped off and ran up to Savior, there was a note tied to his neck that said,
Dear Justin,
You have found out that Kindle was a dark angel but the thing is, she is still HALF a dark angle! Sometimes she gets possessed by evil spirits trying to get her back on there side. And I am sorry to tell you this but until you experience this and find a cure for it Savior will be contaminated by a life threatening disease, so you can either do nothing and let Savior die, or experience Kindle on her dark side and cure It, There is many possible cures. You must find at least one. Or let Savior go.
-Anonymous
Justin sighed and went to put Savior away. After he put Savior away he went to see Kindle again.
“Hi” started Justin
“Hey” kindle said with a half grin
“Can I sleep here for a few nights?” asked Justin
“Sure” kindle said
On the third night at about 6:00 Justin heard voices from kindle,
“I’ll never go”
“I will not betray Justin and the others”
“NEVER”
“you will be ours” another voice…an evil voice…from a demon.
Then something happened I can’t really explain, it’s like the demons were coming to Earth. Justin watched as Kindle seemed to wake up but possessed. It was happening, the demons were possessing Kindle! Justin wanted to do something but he knew he couldn’t in fear of something far worse than death, facing hell itself! Being taken by demons. A horrible pain that is felt forever.
Kindle stood up, eyes a dark red, demon eyes, then Justin decided on what to do.
Pray
Pray until the lord responded to his prayer.
Dear lord I pray to you to save Kindle from this horrible possession and to send demons back to hell and to never harm us again.
Amen
After the prayer all Justin could do was wait, wait until the lord responded. A few minutes passed and he saw a gold flare and what looked like a dove, after that Kindle fell to the ground and the flare of light left. Then kindle got up, luckily she had her own majestic eyes back.
“Kindle?” said Justin a bit shaky
“Look Justin it wasn’t me I was possessed!” said Kindle jumping right into the situation
“Look Kindle I know what happened, it’s ok.” said Justin.
Kindle smiled with a look of relief. Justin said goodbye to Kindle and rode back to Savior, he had another note around his neck that wrote:
Dear Justin,
You now know the secret of Kindle, the plan was just for you to LEARN about her, but you did more! Because you sent the prayer the demons will never harm Kindle again!
And now you deserve to know who we are,
-the angles above
Justin went back to see Kindle one last time,
“Hi” started Justin
“Justin, look thank you so much!” said Kindle
“Well I knew I needed to do something”
“Justin you don’t know how blessed I am to know you!”
“Well, I’m just an average boy”
“Justin, I may be the angle but you are the hero in my life.”
The End
