BOOK LOVERS! discussion

You need to elaborate on more stuff, Y.

For example, who's Sam Chacko? Why is he investigating whatever it is he's investigating? Is this all you have for your blurb?

I'd recommend you take a look at blurbs of other books and think about what you like about them. You have to consider how most blurbs have something that draws the reader in, spikes this sort of curiosity within them that makes them want to read the book.

I'd also recommend not being so... up to front with some stuff. For example, you could try something like this:

'When Arjun, bumped into Anita, he fell head over heels for her. The only problem is that she is engaged. To one of his best mates. (You'd haave to insert some more stuff, maybe elaborate on what you mean by 'who knew her by a different name at a different place' Who are you talking about? Why did he know her by a different name? Try elaborating?) All hell is about to break loose and things only got worst from there...


I'm not an expert on blurbs and I'm not gonna even pretend that I stand any chance of working as a pro in the writing industry, but I'm just giving you some thoughts you may wish to consider.

Also: I don't get the connection between Arjun, Anita and Sam Chacko. It kinda feels like Paragraph 1 (Where you talk about Arjun & Anita) and Paragraph 2, Where you talk about Sam Chacko are from two separate books. If they're from one book, that's a concern... May wanna consider mentioning some connection between your three characters without going into too much detail.

Arjun doesn't know she is in engaged to his best friend?
I don't think Arjun is such a good friend if he doesn't know his BEST friend is engaged.
And this Sam detective makes me even more confused.
If Anita is hiding something, maybe you should mention that in the blurb without actually giving away what her mystery is.

I'm sorry, your blurb makes me confused. I didn't know where is started or where it ended.

Oh and if you are trying to say Arjun doesn't know Anita is engaged to his best friend, then at the beginning of your blurb you said;
"When Arjun, who had fallen head over heels for his colleague Anita, realizes that she is engaged to his close friend"

You just said he did know.

OK, I am confused officially.

Okay... so... what explanation can you give for Arjun not knowing that his 'close friend' is engaged to Anita? Sorry, I'm just trying to get my head around the whole concept...

If you have to explain your blurb then maybe you should re think about it.
It's made me even more confused.
And is this book free? Cause I won't pay for a book that has made me confused just from your blurb.

I might pass. I don't get the story line. Your characters are confusing.
And I just realized I have used the word confused a lot.
That's what your blurb has done to me.