Creative Writing discussion

This discussion thread is going to be remain under the Character Writing topic because of easy access when writing.
This thread is also to be used for discussing the story of "Forbidden Waters" and clear up any ideas/dialog/ or other parts written that need to be talked about in depth so the other members who are writing have a clearer understanding of what has already been written.
As always please do not discuss upcoming evens or ask someone to do something in their writing. ~Everyone has equal say in control of the story~

So starting off i would like to say that i personally think it will be hard to get this one going in a direct path, however, i do feel like once this story gets going we will love it just as much as we did to disobey a command, we just need to get the ball rolling in the right direction ;)

Just a reminder that the story should be written in 3rd person. :3

I'm so excited! Almost done with my character

*edit*

Actually, I'm now divided between two ideas for characters. I'm probably going to make both and post later. :P

Im probably going to make another too :3

Sorry for posting an empty character, but goodreads won't allow me to edit that comment for some reason.

Haha its all good, i deleted it (i hope thats alright). I love your characters!!! Just to make sure, your first one is a mermaid right??

if you need music to listen to when writing this is what i listen to. it inspires me when i get stuck sometimes.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jiwuQ6...

Yeah, perfectly fine. I was going to delete it eventually :P

And yes, she is a mermaid. Well, her background is kind of complicated, but right now, she is a mermaid.

THAT MUSIC IS AWESOME. Just sayin'.

Haha sounds good. I'm really excited for this story. You guys have added so much that it can be branched off into! The only concern is the location. I feel like it is going to be hard to get them away from the lake. Idk. Maybe not. We'll see. :P

FYI, I changed my post a little. Not the intent, just polished it up a little.

okay! i shall read it over! and if i need, i will change mine as well. :P

i just realized that Mela might not know Isaacs name because you kept writing the boy. However, do you think it fits that i put in 'come isaac, drink the waters, remember?' I can change it if it doesn't make sense.

DON'T CHANGE IT.

:)


I'm actually working on my next post, which incorporates it. :D

okay awesome!! :D

Okay so, Kate you might want to look at the wording in your last entry a little more. I had to read it a couple times before i was 100% sure of what you were trying to get across. I loved it though and im glad that you were able to move the story (which was something i don't think i would've been able to do). There are just some pieces to the puzzle that are missing. ;)

That any better?

Where did Asami go? :(

I shall read! and idk! i will message her!



Edit:

yes that was better! :P

I kind of want to post...but I don't want to leave Asami in the dust

she'll catch up. If we don't continue the story it will fade away like to accept a command did.

Nice merman! :)

haha thanks XD i felt like we needed another. and i've never written about mermaids or men before so it should be interesting :P

Changes it up a little :P I thought it would be interesting to have a mermaid in a lake rather than the ocean, just to see what we could do with it.

well i have an idea on how they live, but your last post could certainly change that up a little ;)

My original idea when I created Mela was that she wasn't actually a mermaid. At least, not naturally. That when she became a protector, that was her "assignment" and the power of the lake changed her. But I'm starting to get other ideas too, so now I don't know.

I guess we'll see where the story goes.

Not to be confusing, but what I don't get is how Mela wanted Isaac to come with her in the lake before Alden got to them. But now she seems like she is fine with them being taken away. I also don't get who you are referring to as mistress.

But I do like the idea of her changing back, it gives me an Idea on how to create drama from within the lake. >:P

I should have an entry on forbidden waters before the end of the day

I also feel like this story is going to have a lot of flashbacks

Ohh,,,,, OHHHHHH I get it now the mistress of the lake. I'm sorry I didn't get that right off the bat. The mistress is the leader of the protectors???? We'll that certainly changes my idea. Hmmmmmmm. We will see. I still think that the lake needs drama so I'll try and find a way

Yup. Sorry, I tried to be vague, but not too vague. I really didn't want to just come out and say it :P So every time I italicized type, it was the mistress (of the lake? of the protectors? are they the same or are they different? that's a whole 'nother question) talking to Mela or Alden, ordering them to do something or controlling them.

Now the flashbacks...my first idea was that Mela and Alden (or any protector for that matter) were forced to be one. Any memory of their past life was locked away, and they would only have what memory or motivation their mistress wanted them to have. But, anything might trigger a slip in her hold.

Just ideas :P As with our stories, both of you are welcome to take them and change them into something better :P

Edit: So the first post I did, the first italics is the mistress telling Alden to not shoot the boy. The second was the mistress telling Mela to get the boy at at all cost.


I've also tried to do italics when using she, whenever I mean the mistress, to try to keep it more clear when I mean the mistress or when I mean Mela. I'm probably just making it more difficult though :/

Now I think I get what you are trying to say. So what I got from what you said was that Alden and mela are protectors of the lake. The mistress of the lake lives in the lake, and the mistress is essentially a bad guy (but we don't know that yet) I shall work on my post now

I did intend for the mistress to be the bad guy. Buuuuut...she could be a misguided good guy. sort of. Depends on where we want to take the story :P

Lol yes. (one of the rules we used to have was no discussing upcoming events, and i think we should keep to that a little more closely XD) but yeah. There are just so many options it's really hard to choose which one to wrtie about!!!!

Can't wait until you finish!!!

And yeah, no discussing upcoming events :P

I finished. I was planning on adding another part including my character Verran but I decided to save it for my next entry. ;D

Gah!!!!! Such a cliffhanger!

I'm sorry I had too! I was too scared to go forward!!!! D: it was scarier than playing bingo at a nursing home!!!

lol!

why you no?

I'm thinking! :( And I had a big assignment for school. Now that's out of the way, I'll have time to post :P

I'm in the middle of one. I'll finish, fine tune it, and hopefully post by tomorrow night. Fingers crossed.











ASAMI. Don't abandon us!

awesome! can't wait to read it!!

















I KNOW!! WE NEED YOU BACK!!!!

Yay, Asami! :P

Literally so happy you're back. Asami, you have no idea

Your guy's posts are so good. And I see that two can play at the cliff hanger game kate! >:P I can't wait to write!!

Ha! I couldn't resist :P

Greetings all -
I know I'm a newcomer, and I've gotten the distinct impression that this is a tight-knit group with a lot of shared history, but I'd really like to join in if I may. I've got a character idea already, which I posted in the character creator thread, if you'd like to take a look at it.
So let me know if you think Hasha could bring something to this story. Given that last post (11/11), it might not be a bad idea to be able to switch perspectives, and really make that cliffhanger earn its keep. : )

Nice to meet you Dana!!!

haha yes we are indeed a tight-knit group. we started together in 2009 and finished a very long story together. We actually had 4 people who worked on the last story. Kate, Asami, me, and the other girl's name was Kat. So i don't see a problem at all with adding another person! It think it would be great for another person's perspective and also it would help get the speed of posts moved up!!!

The only request i have, if you do join us, is that you come on and check this story and discussion once a day. ;)

Sounds good! Thank you for the welcome, John, and hello to Kate and Asami as well. : )
I put my first post up, and I don't think that I crossed any lines. Let me know if there are any problems though, as I'll be learning as I go.
Thanks!

Holy freak.

Welcome to the club, oh masterful wordswoman.

I bow to your greatness.

I LOVE YOUR FREAKIN' POST.

Yeah, I can't really say more than that :P I loved it, you're awesome, and I am a worm compared to your eagle.

I loved it as well! I mean it was amazing. So amazing, in fact, that i had to click your name to see your profile and I must say that it is an honor to have someone with a published book writing with us.

One of the main reasons for writing a story the way we are is to get different ideas and visions from others that we ourselves can't think of. You did that in your post. I didn't think that Isaac would be the leaders son, but you made it happen and it was awesome.

The only thing that i would suggest is, because this is character writing you can only write for the character you created (plus ones that don't belong to anyone such as Graham), it would be in your best interest to work your character into the story that interacts with the others.

But, you do what you want, that post was so good. And it seems like you know what you are doing. You will fit in perfectly here. :)