Young Writers Group discussion

I really enjoyed reading this! I look forward to reading about what happens next. :)

I had just one problem with it though. In your sentence, "Mr. Dumpfire pushed her father, punched him and grabbed the shovel and start digging me up.", I'm pretty sure you meant that "me" at the end to be "her", right? Because it's third person, not first.

Roxanne wrote: "I really enjoyed reading this! I look forward to reading about what happens next. :)

I had just one problem with it though. In your sentence, "Mr. Dumpfire pushed her father, punched him and grabb..."

I liked the story a lot. It almost made me cry. I love that you left us hanging. I really want to find out more.

Woah, I want to read more! The event that shaped Annabel's life was very vivid with betrayal. And the end of that part was quite the shocker. Who knocked her out?! I wanna know!