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Theodosia of the Fathomless Hall
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Dec 11, 2013 03:26PM
Awesome! Thanks loads for being honest :D. Hah, seriously - good luck! I am looking forwards to reading it :).
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Comments, feedback; and assorted thoughts:So far this is excellently well-written for a fanfic, you could perhaps cease in almost quoting from the books directly( e.g "Disguised as a lawyer" "Faces from the Fields of Punishment").
You are showing quite admirable recall for the books though :).
(Also, "How in the Underworld?"
:)) )
Oh. I love how she thinks: "Though Nico didn't have the Hades figurine yet" shows rather realistic nerves, lol!
Hm...I'm offering advice on one thing: If she is a demigod wouldn't she already KNOW Persephone? For that matter wouldn't some-one reading it know her presuming they were a fellow demigod? Thoughts...
And there is my self-absorbed rather uppity feedbacks :). I've only read the first chapter as of yet... Thanks for writing!
*aghast*Ron WEASLEY?
Random: MY DOG JUST STARTED EATING MY JEWELRY!
Family heirlooms, Fiske.
FAMILY HEIRLOOMS!
But they're fine,
Lol...You know Anastasia Inkyfingers had a crush on him too :).Incorrect, bzzt; my brother and I just chased her outside, she's a puppy and not house-trained, thus chasing her outside, in 8 degrees Fahrenheit. In FLUFFY SLIPPERS!
All's when that ends well...It worked out despite it being harrowing...
;)Not where we live. It's not Canada but it's bad...
Actually it was less lol and more abject terror.
(And I have to amend the previous statement: we've had her for a week and she's four months and eight days old. Ergo: she isn't house-trained, ergo, getting her outside).
And I must deparht...

