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Everything leaves a scar
Nothing leaves unharmed
Or it could leave a mark
But it's telling the truth

The fights you fought in
And every time you sinned
The classes you skipped
And the words you said

When you've been hurt bad
And you go all mad
And you're seeking for revenge
There's a scar in you
People who hurt you will regret
But the pain you suffered you won't forget

Every right I did
Every wrong I commit
Still there
Memories
Gripping me
Scarring me
Frightening me
Haunting me
Never to be Lost

Are you feeling regret?
Why is it so?
Have you done something wrong?
Or is there something you'd rather forget

Scars leave marks
They are our identity
They help build up our curiosity

Sometimes the scars will heal
But other times it won't
Some scars are invisible
Others are not

There are scars, you've gotten from war
Or fighting for a good cause
Not all scars are bad
But neither are they good

Scars bring our true self
They tell people who we really are
Scars don't lie
There like fingerprints from a crime

This poem is dedicated to my friend Erza

Thank you and goodbye

One day our journey's crossed paths
We were the perfect friend for each other
You were like my sunshine over the clouds
We shared the laughs
And the joy we created together
You were there at the tough times
The times I needed you the most
When you were there I was happy
We did everything together
We crossed every river, every trek together
You bought the real me out of myself
And I helped show the world ,who you really are
And I knew there was going to be a day
When I had to say goodbye
When our journey together ends
I knew you would not leave any contact behind
But I want to say thank you
For being there for me
For accepting who I am
For having a shoulder to cry on
But now we've chosen our ways
And our journey together ends
So now I say thank you and goodbye my friend

i really would appreciate it if you took the time and reviewed it

Those are really good!

Thanks, have you got any advice,any feedback on how to improve it

I noticed that some of the lines rhymed while other didn't. Was that on purpose? Cuz it was kinda cool.

I din't notice that

Well if they were supposed to rhyme, on the last poem where it says
And our journey together ends here
So now I say thank you and goodbye my friend
You could have put
"And our journey together ends
So now I say thank you and goodbye my friend."
To make it rhyme? Idk I'm not good a critique cuz I don't wanna put anyone down or be rude. The poems are really good.

thats was good advice

cool, very good:)

thanks

This is a poem i did in a rush

music playing softly
tears in my eyes
sad songs in my mind
memories of mistakes

drums playing loud
Boom Boom Boom
where will my journey take me next
thrills and joy in my head
heart beating loudly

piano in the room
playing scales
creating feels
never would have imagined

violin playing
sweet and softly
gentle and nice
no sound is better

music is my life
my smile
my emotions
my inspirations
music

singing to sleep
wondering what the day will bring
is it full of happiness
or full of despair

playing a mix
different feels
happy,sad,exited nervous
sounds like life

A good poem should be written with emotion

That is really good!

thanks

This is my first fanfic.Please read and review

https://www.goodreads.com/story/show/...

everybody writes fanfics about Percy Jackson:( lol, otherwise that detail, I love it. I'm sure Percy Jackson fans would love it too:)

Thanks

Your things are really good!

You have talent!

I am spamming aren't I? Okay, I'll stop.

@beth- spamming would be going off topic. you are informing people of their talent. don't ever think that add spam:)

Thanks Beth

Here's another poem

Can’t you see it?

Can’t you feel it?

I thought you knew me best

I thought you knew me more than the rest





I’m slipping away

You might as well go hooray

I’m hiding behind a smile

I feel like I’m running a mile

There are cracks for you to see

But you turn all blind me



I’m suffering pain

What do I gain?

I’m falling down the drain



I’m waiting for somone to notice

Someone to crack through my smile

Tears are flowing

Wind is blowing

Taking one step at a time

I’m getting from bad to fine



You cant see it
You cant feel it
You all don’t notice whats behind a smile

You dont open your eyes
And that’s how it is

Mysterious Maya wrote: "Everything leaves a scar/Nothing leaves unharmed/Or it could leave a mark/But it's telling the truth..."

I really liked this poem.

Thanks

Mask

I have a wall built in me
Hard to brake, Hard to see
I’ve kept my distance from you
Hidden my sorrow for you

You will never break through
I’ll make sure that is true
Try and I’ll go higher
I’ll make sure I’m on fire

My mask is built in place
Blanks will be on my face
Cracks I place for those clever enough to see
Be yourself they say
But tis not true
You can make your way by hiding
And finding
Let go for a second
My mask will break

Disappearing, repapering
Waiting for someone to see
To break through my smiles
And look into my eyes
To see who I really be

Tiredness and weary
Angry and hurt
Slipping slowly
Feeling very lonely


One day my walls will be broken
There will be no need for masks
They will see the pain in my eyes
But for now my walls remain put
Waiting for someone to break through

Mysterious Maya wrote: "Thanks"

You're welcome! :)

Mysterious Maya wrote: "Mask"

I enjoyed reading this poem as well. You've got a real gift with poetry! ^w^

Thank you so much :D

You're very welcome! :)

I’ve heard of a place for the best
For those with mighty brains that never rest
And for those who strives for success

I sought for a position
So I spent my days working
Studying and Learning
Sacrificing so much
All for one golden opportunity

I was only one in four thousands
With only nine hundred to succeed
I guess I wasn’t good enough

At least I put my best on the menu
Even though my efforts went to waste
My knowledge still remained
Another opportunity flew in by
Left with no hope I trudged

Surprisingly I achieved
Even though it was not the best
It was better than the rest
And I made it