Divergent (An Advanced Roleplay) discussion

Name: Marielle "Ell" (After she joins her new faction) Echo Zorua
Gender: Female
Age: Marielle is 16 years old
Birthday: Marielle was born on a leap year, February 29, although they celebrated on the 28 instead.
Faction Before the Choosing Ceremony: Amity, but she was nothing like them, as she grew up aggressive, sensitive, and fierce.

Appearance:
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Written Description:
Hair Color: She has dark brown hair, but she dyed it black one day in Amity so she could prove her inner self. That she was Dauntless, and that couldn't be changed.
Eye Color: Marielle has literally emerald green eyes that glimmer in the sun and moonlight. They have gold flecks littering the irises carelessly.
Skin Tone: Marielle has very fair skin
Body Shape: Marielle is thin and agile, having a 'willow-like' figure.
Height: She is short for her age at only 5'3"
Weight: Marielle weighs 103 pounds.
Pitch of voice: Marielle is a soprano. She has a wispy soft, and flowing voice, her consonants transitioning to the next swiftly. She only sings when she's alone, though, and doesn't pursue it as a hobby, but how she expresses her feelings and gets them out. She doesn't enjoy it much, but she figures it's a solution to let out her anger, yet she rarely does it and promised herself not to sing once she was in Dauntless.
Other: Marielle also got a small tattoo of the Dauntless seal on her neck when she was 14 to prove that she was Dauntless and always will be. Her mother did NOT approve, but she never said anything about it.

Personality: Ell is feisty and mean. She isn't afraid to stand up to somebody. She is strong and quick-thinking in the head. She is cold and stubborn. She does not accept things easily and bullies other people when she doesn't like them because they tease her or something like that. She is sensitive, but doesn't show it, one of her weak spots. She could beat somebody up in seconds. This is how she expresses herself and releases her anger. She doesn't care much about others, she has nobody to love anymore.

History: Ell was born and raised in Amity. Although, at the same time, she wasn't. She was naturally mean. Her father rarely spent time with her. Later, he died of an unknown sudden murder, bringing fear to Amity for a year before dying down. Her mother spends hours lecturing her and being disappointed in Ell for her doings. Ell would always confess what she did, knowing her mother would somehow find out, so she learned to take the easy way and just tell her once she asks. She sometimes bullies her younger sister, Miranda, who is 12. Her mother was considering giving her away, but now she is too grown up for that to make that choice. She has always been determined to leave her faction because she is nothing like anybody else and can't even try to be.

Family:
Mother: Lark Trinity Ringard (Maiden name) Zorua. She is 46 years old. She was Dauntless-born, but transferred to Amity, called a coward several times and she couldn't live like it any longer. She is patient, helpful, and sweet, but she is disappointed in Marielle.
Father: deceased. Richard Thomas Zorua. He lived to be 38, and if he was still alive he would be 45. He was Amity-born. He is tense in several situations, but has mostly the average Amity personality. He regrets choosing to stay in Amity on Choosing Day, wanting more thrill to life. Death unknown to Marielle, but was murdered for no specific reason, bringing terror in Amity, but it settled down.
Older Sister: N/A
Older Brother: deceased. Timothy Jonas Zorua. He died at 16, but he would be 18 now. He transferred from Amity to Erudite. During initiation he died, but her mother never told her why. Only her mother received the news, and she never told anybody.
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Younger Sister: Miranda Byrd Zorua. She is 12 years old. She enjoys Amity, but is thinking of transferring to Erudite. Marielle and Miranda are very distant from each other. Miranda as intelligent, sweet, kind, and willing to do anything you have in supply for her.
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Younger Brother: deceased. Charles Xavier Brooks. He lived to only be 6, but he would be 8 now. Drowned, and Marielle remembered the day. Her entire family went for a walk, Marielle trudging. They went over a bridge, Charles tripping over her foot and sliding swiftly under the rail, drowning in the lake. Marielle thinks it was her fault, and this is one thing. She would never go in Candor, because of this measly time in which she despised. She likes to pretend he was never a part of her family so she won't feel bad. She thinks it's her fault.
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What Faction you Character would like to go to:Marielle knew since she was a child that she would be Dauntless, and she couldn't change that. She dearly wants to be in it, as well.
What Faction(s) Your Character got on the Aptitude Test: To be filled in after the Aptitude Test.
What Faction your Character Chose: To be filled in after the Choosing Ceremony.
Divergent: Yes, Marielle is Divergent.

Other: Ears pierced, but never wears any earrings.

Remember to finish! The Aptitude Test and Choosing Ceremony will take place when all the trainers are created, regardless if you have finished or not.

okay! thank you for the reminder! I've been so busy lately, so I appreciate it!

finished

ok thankyou for creating a character! a few things need to be fixed:
1)please remove the year on her bday
2)bold everything that should be bold ie
3)for the appearance image you need a pic with her whole face
4)you need to take out most of the italicized words unless they are like that in the original template
5)the last other must be filled in

And remove the bolded deceased please.

Okay it will be done tomorrow. Thank you for this amazing RPG! I'm looking forward to it!

Thank you! That is great to hear

done...

You still need a new image

I put it on there...let me try again

Ok thankyou

Ok
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