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kavi ~he-him~, Books are my escape from Reality
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Hi-ya! I'm always open to feedback! I have posted a few stories here on Goodreads and would love to hear anything y'all have to say about them. Some of the pieces are quite a few years old, but here's the link if anyone is willing to look into them:https://www.goodreads.com/story/list/...
Lizzy wrote: "I'll give you feedback later on when I don't have to do quizzes for my COM100 class."Hey, thanks!!! Yuck, Com classes never sounded fun to me.
That's my main problem. Mega stage fright. I've made it this far without having to take a speech class and I'm so glad. Part of me wants to get up and get over the fear, but the other (stronger) part of me is like, "no way, Jose!"
Actually, I'm gonna graduate in May without having taken any kind of speech class. There are pros and cons to that, of course.
Ew, yuck. Well, at least it will make you better and maybe even give you a few fun memories along the way :) Though, I'd be a little mad about the math class. I love math!
Coralie wrote: "Ew, yuck. Well, at least it will make you better and maybe even give you a few fun memories along the way :) Though, I'd be a little mad about the math class. I love math!"Is Logic kind of like Math? I'm taking it this year and I would like to know what to expect.
Lorien Rhys wrote: "Coralie wrote: "Ew, yuck. Well, at least it will make you better and maybe even give you a few fun memories along the way :) Though, I'd be a little mad about the math class. I love math!"Is Logi..."
I never took a logic class, but I know there are logic concepts that can fall either into math or law. I remember going over logic in math, but I've never done a full on logic class. That would be cool, I think! I'm not so sure what it would look like in a law or political science context, but it's probably something to do with fallacies in arguments or something like that. Maybe a debate thing?
I think so. Cause in Logic you have all these symbols that mean "applied to", "or", "and", and several others. It's real pain to learn it though. I'm sure somewhere in life it may come in handy.
Well, I hope you have fun with it. :) Even if it's not your thing, surely you can find something that will make it interesting and pertain to you. I always thought it would be neat in an English context. It would make your stories more solid if you can root out any illogical scenarios, right?
Yes. Though I certainly hope I can understand it better.
Buddy up with someone as a tutor? I'd love to take a class like that, but it's been so long that I don't know if I'd be much help.
Lorien Rhys wrote: "I think so. Cause in Logic you have all these symbols that mean "applied to", "or", "and", and several others. It's real pain to learn it though. I'm sure somewhere in life it may come in handy."Hi Lorien, I studied both Maths and Logic and I do not think that they are much alike, especially in terms of actually doing them.
An exposure to logic will help with identifying weak arguments especially if you can identify is someone is using a logical fallacy.
Check out the list of informal fallacies on Wiki
For public speaking the toastmasters organisation is widely based, there is probably a chapter somewhere near you.They are a very supportive organisation explicitly focused on developing your public speaking capability.
They will also get you to write speeches which can be quite fun/challenging to do.
Lizzy wrote: "I was kind of mad, but I hate math because it's my weakness. ..."Hi Lizzy,
(I'm going to have a gnaw on that "weakness" comment.)
I failed year 11 maths in high school twice (i.e. I also failed that year and had to repeat it to collect enough passed subjects to pass year 11).
As a consequence I had no math in my final year at high school which was very limiting in terms of what I could do next.
I eventually, after several years of dead end laboring jobs, got the year 10 and 11 maths text books and taught myself math and then repeated Year 12 (last year of high school).
It literally took me 4 years of my life, and 10 years on the calendar to complete the last two years of high school.
(Please don't try this at home, it's not something that I would recommend...)
I then went to University and studied math through to second year and then decided that I had, had enough and moved on.
The bottom line from my little true life story is that the perception of weakness may be off.
Maybe, you just need more independence about how you learn it.
Graeme wrote: "Lizzy wrote: "I was kind of mad, but I hate math because it's my weakness. ..."Hi Lizzy,
(I'm going to have a gnaw on that "weakness" comment.)
I failed year 11 maths in high school twice (i.e...."
I love the way you put that. It's the same concept as "I don't like to read" "Well, you just haven't found the right book, yet." Math doesn't have to be as complicated as everyone makes it. Yeah, some people have a little easier time with it than others, and people tend to enjoy different subjects. But if you learn to approach math in a way that best suits you, I don't think it has to be a detriment or a bad experience in any way. :-)
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these are the 3 topics:
1. What was the environmental in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood, or community, and explain how it has shaped you as a person.
2. Most students have an identity, an interest, or a talent that defines them in an essential way. Tell us about yourself.
3. You've got a ticket in your hand - Where will you go? What will you do? What will happen when you get there?
I picked the 2 one, but we have to write a personal story, and a Commentary.
Ƙανу Jαcкѕση Ƒυℓℓвυѕтєя ~And now I see you've got something to prove, And nothing to lose, so let me tell you the truth.~ wrote: "I have to choose from one of these 3 topicsthese are the 3 topics:
1. What was the environmental in which you were raised? Describe your family, home, neighborhood, or community, and explain how..."
The third one would be a lot of fun, I think. The second one looks the most challenging to me, but perhaps not. It will bring out the uniqueness that is you! Good luck with it.
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Can anyone give me some tips on how I can improve my wattpad story
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sure, what's your wattpad?
Aɴᴅ ɪᴛ·s ᴀʟʀɪɢʜᴛ Cᴀʟʟɪɴɢ ᴏᴜᴛ ғᴏʀ sᴏᴍᴇʙᴏᴅʏ ᴛᴏ ʜᴏʟᴅ ᴛᴏɴɪɢʜᴛ wrote: "Can anyone give me some tips on how I can improve my wattpad story"Definitely!
What's your social security number? LOL
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Ayana Crane and the World of Another Book.
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Both of those titles sound cool, Kavy
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message 33:
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kavi ~he-him~, Books are my escape from Reality
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my college essay:
I love to read books, write stories, listen to music and watch anime. I am currently writing my own novel, which is titled, “Lucina Summers and the Mages,” and I’ve written three chapters so far. I’m also currently brainstorming ideas for a new book, I’m about to write.
As I sit there at the table, brainstorming ideas for a new book, the words comes to my head as quickly as possible. As soon as the words come, I immediately write them own. As I’m writing, I take a deep breath and let it out, as I enter a whole another world, that is completely and entirely my own. I forget all of my problems, and relax. As my mind lets go of all the bad memories, I put my pen to the paper and drag it across, making the words fall out of my head and onto the paper. While writing, I try and twist the emotions in the writing, trying to make the reader cry. Even when I get writer’s block, I still continue to write.
When I’m writing, I only focus on the writing, and nothing else. Writing helps me forget all of my problems, and it is always there for me. It takes me on an adventure and is very enjoyable for me. I love the adventures that writing takes me on. Sometimes, I write to escape reality and get into a world of my own. I write mostly fantasy books. Sometimes I’ll write Dystopian, mystery, and realistic fiction, but I’ll write mostly Fantasy. After I finish writing my books, I’m going to publish them on Amazon createspace.
Writing is something that I am really passionate about. It helps me to improbve on my grammar structure. Writing is really hard and it requires a lot of hard-work and creativity. I have a huge imagination. When I write, I put my imagination to use and I make the story to come alive. It helps me to channel all of my feelings into words and express them into another story. To me, I feel like life is an open book, full of blank pages and we all write the pages as we go. And we can all make the story into any kind of story we want. And when I’m writing, it makes me feel like nothing else can get in the way. Nothing can get in the way between me and writing.
Writing is my favorite things to do and I really love it. It’s also something that I am really good at. I’ve been writing for two years now, ever since I’d realized that I had a talent in writing. And I never really want to give it up for anything else ever.
is there anything I need to change?
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What timezone are you in? I assume it's midnight for you? In case it isn't, let me point out a few things. There were a couple of typos and some punctuation errors [I'm a grammar nerd.] There also shouldn't be any contractions at all in a school/college paper.
Typo, 4th paragraph: "It helps me to improbve on my grammar." structure."
Typo, 2nd paragraph: "comes" should be "come."
Typo, 2nd paragraph: "as I enter a whole another world," You have "a" and "another" there.
Grammar, 2nd paragraph: "I try and twist" this should be, "I try TO twist"
Typo, 4th paragraph: "I make the story to come alive."
Also, you shouldn't end sentences with propositions in a school essay. So, like, "on" or "at" and so forth. You should say, "at which I'm really good," or for whatever the situation calls. Your commas also need some work. Sometimes they were in places they needn't have been, and other times you left one out of a list or when making a compound sentence. The title of your book should be italicized. Titles of big things like boats and spacecraft and novels are capitalized, while titles of small things such as chapters or songs or short poems use quotation marks...
I'm sorry if this came too late for you, but if it did, at least you'll know some of this stuff for future ^.^
Aside from some polishing, though, this is a good paper. I liked the second paragraph the most.
Ƙανу Jαcкѕση Ƒυℓℓвυѕтєя ~Stay with me (stay with me, stay with me)~ wrote: "lol I never really read inkheart before"Really?! Oh my gosh. It's excellent! It's about a book within a book and characters who can travel between the world and the world inside the book. I would totally recommend it. Cornelia Funke. Inkheart
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I'm currently murdering my homework.
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Ugh, I know how painful and stressful they are, Kavy. ~grimaces~ In my experience these things are most manageable if you clear your schedule that afternoon, and just sit down and get through the pain of it all in one sitting. It's terrible and difficult and sometimes takes hours, but if you get the rough draft finished that first day, it is SUCH a relief. And then all you have to do is edit/revise until it's as perfect as possible.
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Neither am I, and I'm sorry to say I loathe them. I wish I could love them or at least not hate them since I'm a writer... But nope. They're awful...And now, onto a less grimace-y topic... Anybody participating in competitions this month? Or anybody reading anything good?
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And now, onto a less grimace-y topic... Anybod..."
Same. I hate essays as well. Even tho I love writing.
It's Creative Writing Synopsis I'm troubles with. A THOUSAND WORDS for it. I already shed my tears and I had two break downs in two days. It's due this Monday.
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What do you have to write about?
A creative writing synopsis? That sounds odd... And that seems like a lot of words for a synopsis. Like,, what do you have to do? Is it a synopsis for a story or something?
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The description:
Ayana Crane is a bookworm. Her life in reality has been really rough so far. Her mom left her when she was younger, and her dad is barely home, and she only has two best friends, Jolie Hood, and Lucas Bradley. They are also bookworms, just like Ayana. They all share a favorite book, which is titled, "Niles Comis and the Elemental wold," and which they all bond over. They all became friends because of that book, and that book is the one that brought them all close to each other. And they all want so badly to escape the real world and live in that book's world. One day, they all went to school then after school, they all went to Ayana's house, and hung out in her room for a while. While they all are hanging out in her room, a porthole suddenly appeared right next to them all, sucking them all in. Ayana and her best friends suddenly appeared in the world of the Book, Niles Comis and the Elemental world. When Ayana, Jolie, and Lucas appeared in that world, they all had Elemental powers, just like the other main characters of the book, Niles Cornis and the Elemental world. In the book, the Elemental world is a world, where everyone has Elemental Powers, such as, Water, Ice, Earth, Air, Fire, Lightning, Light, Dark, and Shadow. The world has both good people and bad people, which are the villains, but some of the villains, such, as Balthazar, Niklaus, Cole, Crowley, Warlow, Neferet, are after Niles Cornis and his best friends, Jayce Stanis, and Xandra Florou, and they want to kill them and then take over the world. Then after a while, of Ayana and her friends, appearing in the Book's world, their favorite characters, Niles Cornis, Jayce Stanis, and Xandra Florou, came by and they all met, and have fun for a while. But there is also danger lurking nearby, and there are some villains out there, and Ayana, Jolie, and Lucas are all trapped in the book. And the only way to get out of that book, is to help Niles, and his friends, defeat the Villains. And along the way, Ayana and Niles falls in love with each other. But will Ayana and her friends be able to help their favorite book characters defeat the villains and get out of that book? What will happen when Ayana and her friends take their favorite book characters back home with them? And what will happen when Ayana and Niles have to separate to go back into their own worlds?
is there anything I need to change or remove?
