Simple Writes discussion

hey, friend!
Super cool that you liked my formatting, but just some props for inspiration would be nice ^-^

I love finding photos of people who seem to be the embodiment of my fictional characters. I assume the girl in the photos above is Aubrey Tanglewood? Seems like a perfect fit for the character description you wrote. I always gather a number of photos in my folder which depict various characters and are either actual or fictional places in my stories. It helps to stay focused on characters and produces more accurate descriptions of places or scenes. I normally keep them in the folder for the hard copies of my manuscript pages, but someone suggested pinning them on Pinterest or other social media...which I thought was a good idea.
Some writing suggestions on the blurb about her....
1. Try to never use the words "that" or "just". They are considered to be weak words.
2. All of the blurb is written in present tense until you get to the next to last sentence. Stay consistent and keep the last two sentences is present tense.
3. You used the word "over" twice in the same sentence.
4. Better to say "a" party loving in the first sentence than "the" party loving.
5. You used "effected" when it seems you meant to say "affected".
6. "Kind of girl" is using words unnecessarily. Better to say "Aubrey Tangelwood is a party loving girl who's bouncy, peppy, ready to party at any time. She's always happy. It's the way she's always been. She goes out of her way to make others happy. Aubrey is also childish for her age. She gets too excited over jelly beans and vanilla scented (better than smelling) perfume. Aubrey is one of the most affected by the upcoming experience. It will shake apart her view on this world.

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