cнaяdоииaу aиd ожу [ advanced roleplay ] discussion

If you are still working on your character, please remember to place it in the Under Construction thread, and post it here when you have finished. You may use a template of your own making, but be sure that it has all the required information.

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[ Name ]
[ nickname(s) ]

[ Age ]
[ date of birth ]
[ city of birth ]

[ Gender ]
[ sexuality ]
[ relationship status ]

[ Affiliation ] gang, disciplinary, or civilian
[ rank ] only for gang and disciplinary squad members

[ Appearance ] picture with a solid description
[ face claim ]
[ height ]
[ weight ]
[ eye color ]
[ hair color ]
[ distinguishing markings ]

[ Personality ] a solid two paragraphs at the least
[ likes ]
[ dislikes ]
[ strengths ]
[ weaknesses ]

[ History ] a solid three paragraphs at the least
[ family ]

[ mode of transportation ]

[ other ]

Name: Syvethle
Nickname:none
Age: 23
Date of birth: August 20, 1990.
City of birth: Venice, Italy.

Gender: Male
Sexuality: Normal
Relationship status: Single

Affiliation: Bone Gang.
Rank: Warrior

Appearance
Slim face, eyes with dark lines under them.(not mascara, not shadows)
5 ft. 7 in.
172 lbs.
Pupils still black, irises black, white part of your eye(I forgot what it is called) still white.
Black hair.
No distinguishing markings.

Personality: Syvethle is an antisocial, sly, clever, smart,(all the same thing basically)witty, quick-thinking, deadly, very secluded from all group activities kind of person, and he is always journeying on his own. Trust him could be lethal, as he has no care for people.
Likes : Nice, fun, sharp weapons.
Dislikes: Dull weapons, social people, idiots.
Strengths: Sword, scythe, pretty much all combat.
Weaknesses: Not getting to join the battle.

History: Was raised in Venice, Italy, helping his dad make pizzas until he moved to America when he was 11. He has been doing nothing interesting since he got to America. Except for, of course, taking self-defense classes 3 times a week, training with weapons 2 days a week.
Family: Only child, mother died of sickness in Italy, then later on my father brought me to America, where he died of the same sickness afterward.

Mode of transportation: Nice, long strolls.

Several things:
[1] you left out the actual age
[2] appearance must be in one paragraph. You basically put everything that you put for the weight and height etc, not what clothing he's wearing.
[3] personality should be in sentences, not just a list of qualities
[4] you need more for history

Overall, please follow the guidelines of the template given

I give up!

Never mind, I edited it.

haha, love 'im. Riker is accepted ^-^