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Background of the world (summary):

In a world left desolated after the Great Wars of the Gods...

The child goddess blinked the tears away from her eyes.

"I want to be in a world where no one judges each other--a world that is kind to all--a world where love will bloom in any and all shapes of forms. This is my hope and desire. This is a window into me."

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The child god, Joshua, took her hand.

"Then let us make that world a reality, let us rebuild the world together."

But it wouldn't be that easy.

"The other warring gods will not let us," the child goddess said. "And we are no match for their power. We are but children."

"We are gods with the power of Genesis, blood of the Light, while they..." Joshua said, anger burning in his eyes. "They are gods of Destruction. Someday, our powers will overcome them."

The child goddess clenched her fists against his, tighter, but gently.

"A promise?"

"A promise."

--end of the background of the world summary--



Possible ending 1 scene summary:
"It has taken us countless lifetimes, but we have finally gained the power to change the world," Joshua, said. The goddess looked at the world. "Shall we begin?"


Possible ending 2 (after ending 1):
"Are you satisfied with what this world has become now?" Joshua asked.
"It's not perfect, but it doesn't have to be," the goddess said, the smile spread slowly on her face. "Humanity may yet have hope."

(Is this your entry? Also are we still sticking to the 800 word limit?)

[yes, this is my entry, just 188 words for now, maybe we can just use the 800 word as a guide? and not a strict rule?]

(Alright cool. No I don't mine you using my statement:))

"It's amusing" An lord of darkness sits among his own creations atop an throne of stone, had spoke. "My weakness lies in the heart of one of those children" Eyes as red as fire nd a gaze as cold as ice stares at an photo from the mind of one of his underlings.

"Where are they going?" He asked as he twirled the liqid in the gold cup he held in his claw hand.

"We haven't found that out, your highness" An timid demonic creature who stood on knee spoke.

"Wrong answer" Shock appeared on the underling's face. With one mightily leap, the dark lord jumps from his chair and landed right in front off his demonic underling. Cutting through the demon, his long thin tail, black as coal, sway from side to side. "Azon! Caliber! Where are you?"

"Here, Sire" A human look boy with purple eyes sat in the throne chair of the dark lord. Beside him stood an older boy whom seemed to be playing a hand gaming device.

"Good. I need you too find and destroy those children." The dark lord spoke.

"My, my" The olden child spoke. The only different about him was he had white hair, as if he was old. His eyes were thin and slant. His gaze was emotionless. "Aren't we fearful"

"Watch your tongue Caliber" The dark Lord warned.

The boy, kid, with purple eyes giggled. "We will do our best Dark Lord. Or shall I say father" With that, the two god children disappears.

"Good this is good" The dark god snickers.

(How's this?)

[very nice, I like it]

(Are we continue this or talking about our writing?)