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That got real dark real fast O_O very creative!
Thank you. Btw, is the right forum to post my silly stories? The first forum i posted this story in someone was just downright rude, even called me loser.
Wow. It's great. And yes, it got dark so quick.
That person was wrong Stuart you are not a loser!!
Thanks. Guess I found the right forum to post stories.
Nope... This happens to have the right balance of everything in it... Your writing is really good... :D
Ok. This is a WARNING!!!!! If you didn't like Tina the Turkey then do NOT read this!He Took My Baby!
“HELP ME! OH, someone Please HELP ME!” cried Shirley as she ran around like her head was cut off.
“Help! He took my baby! He took my baby! OH, whatever is he going to do to my baby?” she shouted.
“Red, Red, you have to help me! He took my baby!” Shirley said.
The other females surrounded Shirley, commiserating with her loss. Telling Shirley all sorts of horror stories (unsubstantiated) about what happens to the babies that are taken away.
Forcing his way through the gossiping females, Red made his way to Shirley.
“Calm down Shirley and tell me what happened.” said Red.
Calming herself down just a little, Shirley repeated the story of how a man came and took her baby. Oh, how Shirley wanted her baby back.
“What man took your baby Shirley?”, asked Red.
“The man that walks around here every day! I don’t know what business he has walking around here all the time! Why did he take my baby?”, asked Shirley for the hundredth time.
“Well”, said Red, “there isn’t anything we can do about it. We aren't’ strong enough to challenge him and if we did, many of us would die in the process so it’s best to forget about your baby and try to move on. You’re young and can have many more babies.”
“But the girls are telling me such horrible stories! They say the man will open my baby up and cook it! Please tell me that isn’t true! The man wouldn’t do that would he?” said Shirley.
“I wish I could tell you what he does with the babies but I just don’t know and neither do these girls telling you these things. All I can say is that when he takes a baby they don’t come back. I’m sorry. You need to forget about your baby and move on as best you can.”, said Red.
Meanwhile, at the house where the man lives.
“Honey, do you want toast with your scrambled eggs?” asked the mad of his wife.
“That would be great, thanks. By the way, why is that chicken squawking its head off for?”, she asked.
“No idea. Maybe we should just cut her head off and put her in the freezer.” he said.
Sml 2017
Wow!! That reminded me of the old old Disney cartoons I used to watch.
LOL, I don't remember this type of Disney shows. :-)
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Tina the Turkey
A Thanksgiv..."
Hey! The Mods are perfectly fine with you keeping up the story, but please put a trigger warning for people who don't like this kind of stuff. Thank you! And please put up precise trigger warnings in each of your stories in the future, if needed. :D
Stuart wrote: "Ok. This is a WARNING!!!!! If you didn't like Tina the Turkey then do NOT read this!He Took My Baby!
“HELP ME! OH, someone Please HELP ME!” cried Shirley as she ran around like her head was cut..."
Great story :)
The first one terrified me so much more though.
I had a hunch about how it'll end.
5 years after World War 3, people started getting bored,tired of no entertainment. So finally something, (a light 5 years after World War 3 people started getting bored and tired of no entertainment to keep them occupied. So finally(a light in the darkness ) is what people were calling it, the Illusionists showed up out of nowhere. Bringing joy,excitement,curiosity,and all the things that come with new entertainment. Including darkness,this darkness called themselves Magicians. Now I know what your thinking "okay,so there's Illusionists and Magicians, aren't they the same thing?" The answer is no they are not close to the same thing! Illusionists use well illusions ,slight of hand, observations, and some of the oldest tricks in the book(just modified to work with the new technology). Making the Illusionists show the one with the most talent. The Magicians on the other hand do not use illusions. Instead their magic comes from the devil, that is why the Illisionists and the Magicians are rivals,but not just in entertainment. Magicians are cruel, slimy,disgusting,freaky,creepy,and so many more things that are just pure evil. The worst part is that they get away with it. Sadly the Illusionists have to be extremely careful, because you never know when someone is watching you waiting for you to make the slightest mistake. Magicians are always watching and waiting for an Illusionist to make a mistake and they enjoy it when you do make a mistake. Sadly the Illusionists do not get away with their small mistakes, some are thrown into jail and others are never seen again! Now after I told you all that your probably thinking (I wouldn't want to be an Illusionist) and you probably wouldn't. I am not like you however,I love the rush of adrenaline,the gasps that come from the crowds of people,and the thrill of knowing that I am being hunted down but yet no one has laid a finger on me.Hi my name is Zjavia,and I am the youngest Illusionist alive. Please give me feedback,and tell me what I Should change!
Please give me feedback, on what I should change.
Uummm! I don't know what happened with my story, it is really hard to read now!! It's like I double pasted something.
Just skip from the first time you see five to the next five.
Karsyn wrote: "5 years after World War 3, people started getting bored,tired of no entertainment. So finally something, (a light 5 years after World War 3 people started getting bored and tired of no entertainmen..."It's a good one. I think some of it seems repeated a little though. Some lines could be merged into one perhaps?
Sounds like it would make a very interesting read, esp. the illusionist vs magician aspect. IMO though, I don't think of magicians as being evil per se, they just want to learn (and keep secret) what they learn.
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It's very interesting. I enjoyed it a lot. I suggest spacing out the story within separate paragraphs instead 1 long paragraph.
I agree with Mylien. Btw, Stuart and Karsyn, both your stories are really good!
Your story did scare me a bit, Stuart
Sorry about the one long paragraph,something weird happened and it all merged together! :-(
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That's fine! Don't worry about it.
Karsyn wrote: "Sorry about the one long paragraph,something weird happened and it all merged together! :-("It happens at times. Once I was getting a speech ready for speaking in school and I clicked something... The whole thing of 200 words divided into 3 paragraphs went space less... It was like: Goodmorning,I'mDeepthifromclass8BandI'mheretospeakonthetopic... It was a headache getting everything sorted out again
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It happens at times. Once I was getting a speech ready for speaking in school and I clic..."
That sucks. Did it happen again with another thing or no?
Nope... Turned out that Microsoft Word needed an update... Correct timing Mr. Microsoft Word Document... :(It happened about two to three months ago itself
Deepthi wrote: "Nope... Turned out that Microsoft Word needed an update... Correct timing Mr. Microsoft Word Document... :(It happened about two to three months ago itself"
My mom and I were having a chat after that incident and she told me that all I had to do was save it and update the software. I was like, "ugh! Why did it only happen when my teachers decided to dump around 8 pages of homework for the weekend?!!"
My mom kept saying that she enjoyed seeing my expression... :(
Tina the Turkey
A Thanksgiving Story
Once upon a time there was a turkey named Tina (not her real name) who lived in the Ozarks. Tina would spend her days wandering around the hills roadsides, and visiting the local farms to watch the chickens run around. She couldn't understand how the chickens could tolerate being penned up all the time.
At night Tina would roost in a tree, listening for any animals that might try to sneak up on her at night. Tina remembered on night when a racoon tried to sneak up on her while she was sleeping. Thinking quickly (for a turkey), Tina took flight and landed in a nearby tree.
One morning Tina was hanging out alongside a road looking for any food people may have thrown out and watching the vehicles go by. One vehicle stopped in the road to watch Tina walking around. Seeing the vehicle stop, Tina walked out into the road to try and get food from the people inside. WOW! The people actually threw some food on the road before they took off. Tina walked into the road to eat the food when BAM! she was hit by another vehicle that was going by.
Not understanding what had happened (she wasn't very smart, even for a turkey), she found herself on the side of the road, unable to move. The car that hit her had stopped and the people were walking towards her. Thank goodness, thought Tina, they were going to help! Someone picked Tina up and threw her in the trunk.
Tina had no idea what was going on! She thought the people were going to help! Why would they put her in a dark place? After what seemed like hours to Tina (actually about ten minutes), she felt the car stop.
When the trunk was opened she was picked up and carried towards the chicken coop. Tina couldn't be happier! She was going to be placed in with the chickens until she was able to return to the Ozarks woods! She would have food and water provided until she was healed from being hit the car.
When the person carrying her walked past the coop towards a stump with an axe in it, Tina didn't know what was going on. The person carrying her laid her head and neck on the stump after removing the axe. Tina was confused and scared about what was happening. She saw the axe rise up in the air over her neck! She watched as the axe came slowly down. Time seemed to stand still as a surprised Tina watched the axe. Tina's entire life passed before her eyes from her first view of the world as she came out of her shell eight months prior to her carefree days running around the Ozark hills. The last thing Tina thought was, why was this happening to her, after all she only came out of her shell in March! Tina felt an intense pain as the axe severed her head from her body and then her life was over (or was it?).
Two days later, Tina's plucked and hollowed out body was cooked and carved up by the cannibal people who had hit her. How cruel to end up as someone's dinner thought the spirit of TIna!
The End