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message 1: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Hi everyone. I'm posting my link for chapter 8 here in a new thread. I've only received 1 review so far for this chapter. If you could leave me some feedback, I'd be very grateful. Thank you.

Chapter 8 - https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 2: by M.L. (new)

M.L. Rodriguez | 119 comments Eleanor wrote: "Hi everyone. I'm posting my link for chapter 8 here in a new thread. I've only received 1 review so far for this chapter. If you could leave me some feedback, I'd be very grateful. Thank you.

Chap..."

I'll give it a look at today. I need to post Chapter 8 as well.


message 3: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments And I've just submitted chapter 9. Again, any feedback is gratefully received! Thank you :)

Chapter 9: https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 4: by Liavali (new)

Liavali | 237 comments Hi Eleanor, just reviewed chapter 8! Story is great, look forward to more when I am able to read more.


message 5: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Liavali wrote: "Hi Eleanor, just reviewed chapter 8! Story is great, look forward to more when I am able to read more."

Thank you so much for your feedback. I'll definitely take it all into consideration in the re-write.

Thank you


message 6: by M.L. (new)

M.L. Rodriguez | 119 comments Eleanor wrote: "Liavali wrote: "Hi Eleanor, just reviewed chapter 8! Story is great, look forward to more when I am able to read more."

Thank you so much for your feedback. I'll definitely take it all into consid..."


Just reviewed your chapter 8. Good work.


message 7: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Here is chapter 10. Half way through! Woo hoo!

Chapter 10: https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 8: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embarrassed to ask them why - maybe they really hated it). So, I'd be super grateful if anyone would be willing to read it. I know it's a big ask though. Here's the link for anyone who's interested:

Doc for 'TABLE READ' Chaps 1-7: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1H...

Thank you


message 9: by Dániel (new)

Dániel | 24 comments I have read all your chapter already. If you want I can do a table read however I am quite busy at the moment. I will have time if you need some help in the second half of December and early January. Also thanks for the insightful review on my 10th chapter. You are absolutely right my summary is unnecessarily long and I need to describe some physical details more than once as it is easy to forget a single line after a few chapters.


message 10: by M.L. (new)

M.L. Rodriguez | 119 comments Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embarrassed to ask them why - mayb..."

Eleanor I'll trade you reads. I've made some changes based off feedback and could always use another review. Let me know if you're interested.


message 11: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Hi, guys. I know there's no rush, but I was disappointed about not getting any feedback AT ALL :(
I'm happy to swap reads with anyone in the group, for sure. Daniel's idea about doing it over Christmas when most of us have some more free time is nice, but I could start (slowly) reading anyone's now if they'd like.

Also, thanks, everyone, for the Coursera feedback on my last couple of chapters. And I've just submitted CHAPTER 11: https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 13: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Chapter 13: https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...

I'd love some feedback on chapters 12 and 13. Thank you.


message 14: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments M.L. wrote: "Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embarrassed to ask..."

Hi Michael. Thank you for the feedback on my chapter 13. I love your idea about making more of the randy old boy. Sometimes I write something I think is amusing but then a worry that my sense of humour is too odd and that maybe other people just think it's dumb. But now I have a whole scene in my head that I definitely want to add in when I rewrite. Thank you!

(And, yes, I'm trying not to fall into Jar Jar Binks territory. I'm aware it's a danger!)


message 15: by Liavali (new)

Liavali | 237 comments I think it is important to say, once and for all, I am NOT a star wars big fan but I thought jar jar bnks was pretty funny. I think people's desire to hate him stems from needing something to complain about in a good movie! Jar jar forever!


message 16: by M.L. (last edited Dec 16, 2020 12:34PM) (new)

M.L. Rodriguez | 119 comments Eleanor wrote: "M.L. wrote: "Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embar..."

Eleanor, never worry about cutting out a joke you think is funny. If you laugh at it, put it in. I myself have an odd sense of humor, so odd nobody gets my jokes. But I get more satisfaction when someone appreciates the warped stuff I throw in thinking no one will get. You make a real connection with the reader when you say, "Ah, I see you're just as strange as me."


message 17: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Liavali wrote: "I think it is important to say, once and for all, I am NOT a star wars big fan but I thought jar jar bnks was pretty funny. I think people's desire to hate him stems from needing something to compl..."

Haha. I didn't hate him with a passion like some people did, but I did think he was very annoying and out of place in the story.


message 18: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments M.L. wrote: "Eleanor wrote: "M.L. wrote: "Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (a..."

Yes! You're absolutely right. I think I'll experiment a bit in the next chapters and in the rewrite.


message 20: by Rachel (new)

Rachel (rwicks) | 66 comments Eleanor wrote: "Hi everyone. I'm posting my link for chapter 8 here in a new thread. I've only received 1 review so far for this chapter. If you could leave me some feedback, I'd be very grateful. Thank you.

Chap..."


Just reviewed it. Good job!


message 21: by Rachel (new)

Rachel (rwicks) | 66 comments Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embarrassed to ask them why - mayb..."

I just table read your story. I can zoom with you if you want. Good story. I understand. I couldn't get anyone to table read my work as well.


message 22: by M.L. (new)

M.L. Rodriguez | 119 comments Eleanor, could you post a link to your chapter 15? I owe you a read but can't find it on Coursera.


message 23: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments M.L. wrote: "Eleanor, could you post a link to your chapter 15? I owe you a read but can't find it on Coursera."

Hi. I fell behind over Christmas. I'm just posting chap 15 today.

Chapter 15: https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 24: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Rachel wrote: "Eleanor wrote: "I'm not having any luck getting people to 'table read' act 1 of my story. Even the couple of people I asked to read it IRL didn't ever get back to be (and I'm too embarrassed to ask..."

Hello Rachel. Thank you for reading it. I'd love to know what you thought. Doing a Zoom at the moment would be difficult. I'm up to my eyes in lesson planning for the new school semester and my deadline is looming. I'm just here now procrastinating, but I'd better get back to it.

I'm hoping I have a bit of time soon. I'll catch up with your chapters then we can swap notes if you'd like.


message 25: by Rachel (new)

Rachel (rwicks) | 66 comments I understand! I am a teacher myself. I am the virtual teacher. What I can do is go back and make some notes in google and send it to you. Would that work? PM me your email and I'll get on it. Would you mind reading over my work? Thanks.


message 26: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Rachel wrote: "I understand! I am a teacher myself. I am the virtual teacher. What I can do is go back and make some notes in google and send it to you. Would that work? PM me your email and I'll get on it. Would..."

That would be great. I'll send you a PM.


message 28: by Rachel (new)

Rachel (rwicks) | 66 comments Working on your paper now. I am adding notes to your last page. Give me another week or two and I'll be done with your round table. :)


message 30: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments It's been a while, but here is Chapter 18 (finally!): https://www.coursera.org/learn/write-...


message 32: by Andres, Thaumaturge (new)

Andres Rodriguez (aroddamonster) | 619 comments Wow congrats on chapter 19. At 20 the course finishes, do you feel your going to wrap everything up next chapter or will you continue writing?

I was finally able to end my book on chapter 24.


message 33: by Eleanor (new)

Eleanor | 82 comments Andres wrote: "Wow congrats on chapter 19. At 20 the course finishes, do you feel your going to wrap everything up next chapter or will you continue writing?"

Hi. Thanks! My original plan had the story ending at chapter 20, but then I added some other details and the subplot with the old aunt, so now I'm not even sure HOW it ends, never mind WHEN. They were supposed to have a frantic dash around the ship in the last 2 chapters, and then it would finish with them safely on their way back to Earth. But now I don't even know if I'm sending them back! I guess I'm about 1 chapter behind my original breakdown, so I'll probably need to write a chapter 21 (at least).


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