Christian Beta Readers discussion

Hello! Author from Toronto here, seeking beta readers for the third draft of my full manuscript of an 84K portal fantasy. It's similar in its premise and subtle Christian flavourings to A Wrinkle in Time (though, of course, who could achieve such heights?!), with just a dash of inspiration from Screwtape Letters. It's written for new adults (i.e. twenty-somethings) wrestling with issues of truth and identity. This is an action story with a love story and a status story going on in the background.

Really appreciate any readers willing to give this a go and offer some feedback. Happy to swap with anyone interested.

Here's my first stab at a blurb:


Midnight, September 22, 2008, White Elephant House, Toronto. Twenty-three-year-old Cora hears footsteps on the stairs. Is it her missing dad, or whoever took him? He disappeared seven years ago. No body, just a cryptic note – with today’s date. Police suspected suicide. Cora didn’t – at first. But after wasting years down rabbit holes, she’s done everything she can to run from it. Now the day is here, and she can’t run anymore. The stranger on the stairs is here for her. She’s the only one – in any dimension – who can find her father, the lost King.

Under the violet skies of Tinvelt, the people have long awaited their prophesized Spring Witch. The one who brings the power to destroy a poisonous dragon and his army of Exilers who have laid siege to their kingdom for a century. Cora travels there with Namrik, Captain of the Dragon’s Watch, and learns to channel her power with the help of a mysterious sorority of witches. But in Tinvelt’s strange, soap-bubble light, not all is what it seems. Cora will have to reveal hidden truths about who she is and the world she’s in, if she’s to save her father, the kingdom – and herself.

Hi, E.R.J. I hope you're doing well.

Your story sounds amazing! My name is Larissa and I would be honored to provide feedback on your writing skills and offer my thoughts on the potential appeal of your story to readers.

Please send me the first 3 chapters at your convenience through my email (larissaestruquel@gmail.com), and I'll make sure to provide you with my most honest and constructive feedback.

Looking forward to reading your work!

Best regards,
Larissa.