Ink In My Veins discussion

Okay, I know that everyone loves to read them, so here's a place where you can trade for them, which is a lot fairer to all involved than just expecting people to do them.

The reviews through this topic should be in-depth, and full of honest advice and helpful suggestions. If you want to be a writer, you have to accept criticism just as much as, if not more than, praise. You can work it out between yourselves, but I suggest doing both a chapter-by-chapter review on the story itself, and then doing a summary type review after finishing it.

Keep in mind when you are reviewing that many of the stories posted on goodreads are rough drafts, but that isn't an excuse for terrible grammar. Don't even bother asking if you haven't taken the time to capitalize what needs to be capitalized and use punctuation.

So we just read one of the stories in the "Your Writing" topic and review it here?

FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT INVOLVES PEANUTS, REVIEW HOTEL NEON IF YOU HAVEN'T ALREADY.

PLEASE.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2...

Sure. Do I post the review here or on your goodreads thing?

For Hotel Neon by Baxter

Wait, I thought his sister's legs were gone, so how does he rest his head on her bare legs?

~**^**~

This so freaky and creepy and weird. Reading this sent chills down my spine. The description is morbidly beautiful. I could picture that city full of screaming, naked people and that bed-less, TV-less, dirty hotel room. It's extremely vivid.

It's also kind of disturbing, but you definitely set the atmosphere clearly.

I mean, admiring and kissing his sister as she slept? In a room with broken condoms? It gives people a…freaked out, sickening feeling. I hope that's your goal, or else you've failed in writing. On the other hand, if it was supposed to be that way. Congratulations, you definitely succeeded! :)

Then he sees a pole dancer that was skinny like hell. Wow. Then he claims that he loves her, when she claims that he loves someone else. That was kind of confusing. And then he turns into paper. Yeah. That was really confusing.

Baxter, you really got talent. It was one of the most unique things I've ever read. Not many writers can write this type of style. I could find a couple typos, so you might want to edit it a bit. It's amazing.

Baxter wrote: "FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT INVOLVES PEANUTS, REVIEW HOTEL NEON IF YOU HAVEN'T ALREADY.

PLEASE.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."

I have already.

So we don't put the review here?

I don't think you need to. If you want?

Anyways, I did.

Cool-cool.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/5... Can someone review this?

Baxter wrote: "FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THAT INVOLVES PEANUTS, REVIEW HOTEL NEON IF YOU HAVEN'T ALREADY.

PLEASE.

http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2..."

Read it. Loved it. Nothing more to say.

Aww, no comment?

You guys, I think Niki means long, in-depth reviews at the end of the overall thing, posted here. Stuff that covers plot development, character development, writing style, all that kind of stuff, and has criticism too. Not just normal reviews you post on goodreads stories after each chapter.

Right.

I did. Kind of. Its longer than any of the reviews I have ever written on other people's stories.

:)