StoryWeaving discussion

This is a story about abusive relationships. Angel and Diana are best friends, but Diana is too controlling. She wants to be Angel's only friend. She wants Angel to take her permission before she does anything. Continue the story, it'll be fun to see where it goes.
-> could result in Angel's death(suicide?)
-> or Angel could get the courage to do as she wants
-> or Diana could realise that her behaviour is wrong.

i love the concept Akanksha, strangled relationships, confused dualities, ah! just mark the perfect story!

Thanks Prerak:-)

Guys, the story is in first person. I know it is completely different from other stories bt dnt u think it'd be fun. For that time, you become the character, all its feelings and emotions are yours to narrate. Do keep this in mind when you continue coz it gets confusing if one post is in 1st person and it gets continued in 3rd person.

k....story weaving narrated that avery talks to angel that shez going to canteen,so i continued vt the response of angel to what avery said.
hmm.....can you express urself more clearly aka

Correct me if I am wrong...Avery is narrating the story in 'real time' ...so it is happening 'live" = first person writing style I said (instead of Avery said)

...but her thoughts or what she can hear happening across the corridor may sometimes have to be put in third person, right? Avery closed the door on her way out...Only then can we fill up the 'voids' with an explanation as to what is happening.

Pure first person writing would be like listening to a person answering the phone? So there may be moments where Angel/Diana describes/thinks about Avery in third person too?

Am I on track or am I raving :-)?

Ash, like you mentioned 'meanwhile in room 205' and then narrated it in 3rd person that's fine too. If we're talking abt stuf happening when Avery is not there it cud be in 3rd person. But when we're talking abt Avery's actions, its got to be first person. For e.g. Instead of saying, 'Avery was going to the canteen' u shud say 'I was going to the canteen'.