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Aug 17, 2011 08:01AM
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as day turns to night,
and morning turns to eavning,
the creatures of the night
step into our realm.
they frighten and scare,
whoop and holler,
only because they want your
COOOKIES!!!
and morning turns to eavning,
the creatures of the night
step into our realm.
they frighten and scare,
whoop and holler,
only because they want your
COOOKIES!!!
my friend charlotte sees me sitting on the ground.
She asks, "why are you smiling?"
I just nod and smile, then shake my head.
She frowns and says"Do you like me? do you want my friendship?"
i shake my head and nod and smile at her.
She storms off.
Later that day, the teacher asks a question.
"Tao, do you know the answer?"
i just smile and shake my head, smiling at her.
She frowns and snaps," go out into the hallway!"
i get up and walk out shaking my head and and smiling.
The teacher follows me out.
"Why are you like this.\?"
i shrug.
"YOU'RE EXPELLED!" she screams
after she leaves, i look behind me,
and take out my IPOD HEADPHONES.
She asks, "why are you smiling?"
I just nod and smile, then shake my head.
She frowns and says"Do you like me? do you want my friendship?"
i shake my head and nod and smile at her.
She storms off.
Later that day, the teacher asks a question.
"Tao, do you know the answer?"
i just smile and shake my head, smiling at her.
She frowns and snaps," go out into the hallway!"
i get up and walk out shaking my head and and smiling.
The teacher follows me out.
"Why are you like this.\?"
i shrug.
"YOU'RE EXPELLED!" she screams
after she leaves, i look behind me,
and take out my IPOD HEADPHONES.
I saw! Wow, those were really good! I like the one about the seven things of life and the one with Elizah.
Hmm... I liked your style and the way you wrote the poems and stories. Though there could've been better grammer. Hmmm... there wasn't much of a plot in one or two of the stories, but you pulled it off very well. I felt like I was in the character's head, and though there was really no description like what I'm used to, but what description you did have was good. The poems were easy to read and understand, and there was a lot behind them. Overall, it was excellent. Good job.
ok. much plot. got it thanks!! :D
Hey everyone who as been reading seven rules of life! SECOND CHAPTER HAS BEEN ADDED JUST FOR YOU SAM lol :D Hope you like! : http://www.goodreads.com/story/show/2753...
tanks did you like the second chapter?
