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PLease comment on this story!!!

Wow! Cool! I like it :)

OOh thank you!!

Sorry if this sounds a bit blunt but; so i like the story, the idea's pretty good, but you need to flesh out the story a bit more, as it is the characters are more a bunch of attributes or skills than actual people (i get the same problem myself, a lot), so you just need to work on that. otherwise, ideas's good. Keep writing, would like to read more.

oh, I kinda added that stuff in what I haven't posted. So I'll add the next few chapters later.

If anyone hasn't noticed, I've updated My End if u were planning on reading it.