Libba Bray Lovers! discussion

Yeah well, as some of u kno I'm writing a story about Mary the summer before the roleplay started. In it is Will, Majorie(u don't know her yet), and even a little of Sahira. So far. It's turning out a bit longer then I thought, but wutever. Soo it's on my profile and I'd like to know what you honestly think. Btw, people that don't roleplay if you're reading this subject, you're welcome to read it too! See what'cha think!

OO, THERE ARE MORE CHAPTERS?

Ahem.

lol yeah. 5 so far. i would b writing it now, but sam(my sister) is on the computer i have it saved on sooo yeah.

WOOO!!

I needs help.

Marjorie, Mary's cousin is kinda a poet, so in spanish i was really bored and thinking of poems. Which one is better of these two?
Whispers in the Moonlight
Lovers holding hands
Children fall asleep
Peace reigns throughout the land.
or
Whispers in the moonlight
lovers holding hands
peace is in the city
we make our final stand
neither are really good, i kno, but i was in spanish soo nothing poetic or romantical bout that. oh and i also thought of two more, not v. good either, haiku-ish, but not really...
Leaves tumble from the trees
Like little golden suns they fall
And with them, my spirits.

A breeze hits my face
full of warmth, laughter, and love
Relief in this dreary winter

Not good?

You're kidding right?

I love the peace reigns through the land poem.

That's a keeper.

um. i wasnt joking. but i'm glad u like it! the peace one i liked better too, buuut yeah

I like them, but I like the other one where it says we make our final stand more than peace reigns through the land