A.R.'s Friend Comments

Hi Nigel,

Thank you so much for getting back to me, I really appreciate it. My apologies for the delay though in responding.

I am really pleased you enjoyed Our Blue Orange, and hope that when you read the second volume, you are equally enamoured.

Best wishes

AR

PS I will get on the alterations asap

Thank you for adding me to your menagerie. It is easier than trying to communicate in 250 characters (including spaces).
I finished Blue Orange with my morning cuppa, and thoroughly enjoyed it. The book I mean, although the cuppa was pretty good too. I will slap a review on here & Amazon in a mo, and seeing that I just added some porcelain lips to my Amazon basket, I suppose it will be a 5 star job. Sign of a good book - wanting to read the next one.
If you fancy a break from whatever you are writing now, and feel like tidying up Blue Orange, there are a few tweaks you could look at:
P60, towards the bottom - He was not use to getting anything else - should be used.
P80, towards the bottom - tearing out draws from his desk - should be drawers.
Same at the bottom of P120 - draws - drawers.
In a similar manner, the book is peppered with hangers, things to hang clothes on, but I think hangars (sheds wot planes go in) would work better. Four on P147, one on P148, two on P149, one on P216, one on P228, and one on P230.
Can you tell I have done a lot of proofreading in my time?
P193, right at the bottom, the Dheybar struggle - should be struggled.
P217, at the end of the short scene, the XXL may well be illusive, but in this context I think it should be elusive.
Last of all, at the bottom of P 295, earth should be Earth, proper noun and all that.
I hope this helps. I am just one of those obsessive types who notices these things and bothers to point them out. Updating on Amazon is a doddle. I have already tweaked my own first offering twice, and it took less time than a good sneeze.
You are genuinely nuts sir, and it is much appreciated. You must have had a lot of fun writing this one. I am already warned that Porcelain Lips may be a bit more serious, but that is fine, and I look forward to reading it soon.
Enjoy your Sunday.