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Major English (Laura)
is 85% done
I so dislike when the two MCs take such a long break from eachother, because as a reader, you kind of forget how good they were together, so when they finally reconnect after having been away from each other for like 10% of the story, you forget how good they were together in the first place and aren't rooting for them as much because their sizzle has fizzled. But of course I'm still rooting for these two!
— Mar 26, 2013 11:44PM
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Major English (Laura)
is 85% done
At this point the style and tone of the narration and the dialogue is making it hard to believe that the two MCs are only 22. Sounds more like they are 35. Im going to go ahead and call this the "Dawson's Creek syndrome" - where characters say things that older folks would say. It's making it difficult to connect with. I have to remind myself that the MCs are just kids.
— Mar 26, 2013 11:21PM
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Major English (Laura)
is 65% done
Content warning: torture, rape
— Mar 26, 2013 12:04AM
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Major English (Laura)
is 45% done
I like this but The euphemisms for body parts and the like in this are horrid! "tool," "rod," magic button," "sweet seed" Uggg.
— Mar 25, 2013 10:05PM
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