Status Updates From Frogspell (Spell #1)

???? Why are they SITTING there. 3 pages ago they were talking about how urgently they had to leave before the BBEG showed up. Now they’re just sitting there eating cheese, seemingly forgetting that they themselves, and not just the reader, have the knowledge that the villain is on the way???

God the fatphobia is actually getting unbearable at this point. All the nasty characters are overweight. We get it. Shut up about it for 5 minutes and focus on something more important

94 pages in and its got the first act of affection between any of the characters. Up until now its been pretty nasty attitudes, imo

So far it feels very mean-spirited. Nobody in the book likes each other, the author takes any opportunity to mock the characters, and they generally just don’t have any traits to encourage you to like them. The only fat character is “ugly and mean and gross.” And the narration switches between POV characters haphazardly, going through 2-4 characters’ internal dialogue in a single scene.