Status Updates From The Crimson Scar: A Fantasy...

Lowkey the story is getting a little bit good (the writing remains terrible)

Ok here’s an example of a problem I read in EVERY PARAGRAPH.
“A crimson chair with the most uncomfortable back”. Tell me why.. are there spikes in it? Is it strangely curved? Don’t say “I’m uncomfortable”, tell me why and let me imagine just how uncomfortable you must be to sit in that chair.
Maybe this chair is a weak example but shit writing like this is constant.

Do you guys ever read a romance book and think ‘oh yeah, this author is a virgin for sure’ ?

The queens son is the teacher calling it now and she ends up with him.

I HATE THIS BOOK BRO SHE IS A TERRIBLE WRITER

Also, the best pitt fighter in their city but her identity is secret and now she’s entering a competition to be the city’s champion to earn something she needs desperately and everyone thinks she’s just a girl and not an incredible fighter ?

I fear I’ve seen this trope before in a very popular and highly regarded book…..

OMG I HAVE PROOF NOW!!! The main character is 13…. 13. I swear to god this is evidence that the writer is only 15. Or 12.

I watch the wheels rotate inside my sisters head as she digests what’s happening

DO YOU SEE WHAT I MEAN

Ok ok either the author is 15 (forgivable) or she’s just genuinely a terrible writer (unforgivable).
I’m sorry but if this wasn’t for a book club I would have DNFed at page 20.

I know I’m very critical but I feel like the author is a teenager. I think some of the writing is off. “Standing intimidatingly to the side lies a building” and “the only sound remaining is the lava river” are such ?bad ?juvenile ?unimaginative things to say. I know I sound crazy but there’s so many examples of just boring and on the nose descriptions of things. VERY tell and not show which I fucking hate

Ahhhh yes, the only one of her kin with a different hair colour. “The same shade as every ravens, except mine” 😏😏

“His teeth inhumanly white” well duh you just told us he wasn’t human 2 seconds ago

A little too content for “a procreator”

Is this a girl or a boy

Reading this for a little book club so I’ll be updating my reading lots hopefully with my thoughts so I have something to talk about at said book club