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Gaston Prereth
is 43% done
This really isn't that well written. Few typo's and constant jumping of tenses that makes description and dialogue fragment. The narrators voice is wrong for the character too and bears little relation to his spoken dialogue.
— Mar 08, 2013 04:53AM
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