Status Updates From The Agent's Daughter

This is starting to get interesting!

Even for a teen this is dumbed down and if you are going to write in omniscient third point of view know how to write it omniscient third point of view. The story has promise but I don't want to read it because it is SO dumbed down I want to bash my head into the wall. I am only 12% through and started finding myself just glancing over dialogue because of this so I had to put it down.