Status Updates From Beneath a Navajo Moon

Chapter 21 does a credible job interlacing history within the plot conclusion through dialogue.

The main character, Erin, is a bit too soft and naive for her background making her unbelievable. The author's contrasted rendering of Erin against the antagonist, Deborah, is understood, but Erin is too unsure of herself and sappy when it comes to Adam Silverhorn. She is also an emotional adolescent where it concerns her parent's expectations for her. These weaknesses wear thin on the reader.

Chapter 12 - If the main character is a capable woman of 27, then why does she retreat from the baseball game thus disappointing a child who admires her because of one jealous trollop? She needs to thicken up and remember who is important.

I love chapter 11 with the Navajo Code Talkers.

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