Status Updates From The Diary of a Middle-Aged ...

Sigh. Seriously? You have the stereotypical “male and female characters accidentally see each other naked” trope with a girl of what, 16, and a 40+ year old man??? That’s GROSS! Stop that sh*t!! Yeah, HE has no interest in her, but to have HER have an interest is JUST as bad as saying “she asked for it”. WTF?! HARD DNF.

“Their sharp blades had been forged by Satoshi himself; he had been a prolific crafter in-game.” So if he made them, he should know what they are. Also, ‘prolific’ or ‘proficient’? The latter would fit better here. At 2% and I’m starting to fume… this might be a rage DNF. It gets ONE more big goof or two smaller ones and I’m DONE.

“Both were rapiers, or shortswords,…”

No. Rapiers and short swords are NOT the same thing, ergo, the two swords could not BOTH be rapiers AND short swords. Yes, it says “or” not “and” in the quote, but it implies that rapier is another word for short sword. And if they are his two trusty weapons, how could he define them so incorrectly? Two stars docked so far.

this story have a good plot. the MCs it a good man and his adventures in details with this new world.

this story is good. it a another world story. the MCs it a good man to follow and this it adout this man that strong and wise in this new world.