Status Updates From The Ever-Dark: A New Adult ...

Has been good so far, besides feeling rushed. Narrative prose is very good, though some of the dialogue feels stilted and unnatural; used more for exposition than natural interaction in some parts. If pacing was improved, this issue could probably be avoided.

It’s alright. Story is interesting but pacing could be improved. Chapter 2 felt like several different chapters pushed together and rushed. As the story so far is supposed to have happened over several days it would have been nice to have seen each day/event expanded on instead of shown for 2-4 paragraphs and then moved on from.

Not terrible, feels pretty rushed though. Sorta just going “Oh? Okay. I guess this is happening now.” the entire time. Can’t really get a feel for who the character is so far. Has lots of potential though and I’m hoping for a reason to actually care about Violet other than “she’s the main character” because like… who IS she?

Nope. DNF