Status Updates From The Book of Fallen Leaves: ...

“The man took too long to die.

He thrashed and screamed and trembled in the girl’s arms, and at the end, he begged for mercy, clutching at her with a wet, wavering voice, choking and full of fear. But he was just a priest. She was small, no more than a child, and the man was weak, and the knife was not too heavy.”

Hell yeah I support women's and girls' wrongs

Sigh. This author is more interested in the way his words look on the paper than on whether or not it has the desired effect on the reader.

This is VERY visual writing, and I am not a visual reader, lol. I’m getting Ghibli vibes—but of the darker, Mononoke-esque sort.

locking back in

Yes this is an uncorrected proof, but I don't think 1 more edit would fix some of the issues I'm seeing here 😬