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Mel’s inner dialogue is funny, at first, until its incessant and takes away from plot progression. It’s like being stuck in a cyclone that bypasses anything interesting and instead has you in an endless spiral of repetitive thoughts. I just want to read the STORY. I don’t want to read her constant stream of unfinished thoughts.

It's good! There's no tone inflection or facial expressions being described so its difficult to know when someone is being sarcastic, loving, joking, flirtatious....