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Too rushed. How did she manage to learn all of one realm's magic in 5 minutes?! Two different scenes are mashed together, no transition so it's chaotic. And the little things- like their thoughts, expressions, smells etc. Everything is curt and straight to the point. Feels like someone is telling me what the book is about instead of me reading it...

Great story. Still needs a good editor and it shows. Shame, cause it has so much potential 🧐

This sounds like they're asking her to join a cult 😳

Some things should have been revealed more, some things should have been held off 👾

"The Medulla Realm tells tales of whimsical woman who wears glowing white and purple silk while she dances in the forests among the fireflies. Her dance is now a common occurrence at Medulla's social gatherings whether they be at balls, quaint parties, or village festivities. They call her Lila"

I love it when I see my name in a story. I never did growing up 🤗

Love the magic system and the different realms! Gnosi Realm sounds very interesting 👻

Omg my fangirl heart