Status Updates From The Crystal Cave (Arthurian...

The prose is great, but it's still *a lot* of narration and direct exposition. Merlin explaining his abilities to people is repetitive. I don't think we need this minute play by play of the battle strategies daddy's using to conquer Britain. Could have cut the middle 50%, aged up Merlin, told us the results of the invasion, and introduced Arthur, and we wouldn't have lost anything character or plot wise.

note: is this fantasy or historical fiction?