Status Updates From Whitefire

These characters are beyond schizo. 🫣 Their only consistency is their inconsistency.

Dear author: I’m certainly no horse expert, but I do know fillies & colts are different sexes. So when your 2 sick colts become 2 sick fillies, & then they’re 2 sick colts again…cringe. I believe FOALS is the word you need, not FILLIES. 😂 Shame bell, activate…… 🔔

I’m trying to get into this, but the prose is so flabby & meh. I smell another DNF approaching. *sigh*

‘Spent, he staggered to his feet & stood looking down at the naked body of the young girl. A pity he couldn’t see what she really looked like in the ebony night. His own words rang in his ears: “I’m not a cruel man…I’m not one to inflict pain.” He shrugged. Every man was forced at one time or another to tell a lie. Why should he be any different?’ ….Lol. Douchebag hero alert. 🙈

Many readers hate this one & find it offensive and/or problematic. Offensive & problematic, you say? That’s generally code for rapey & OTT. Which is generally code for Sarah Is Amused. *steeples fingers* 😈