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Meep
is 68% done
Sweet; they're lovely couple, people around them are nice.
But it does risk being too bland. Their personalities tend to merge to where I've had to check whose pov a few times. For two handsome, super-fit, successful men they're both very unsure; which is both endearing and a little too much. The details of their busy lives is killing any tension, the sex scene has little oomph, when there should be stars.
— Jun 13, 2019 07:13PM
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But it does risk being too bland. Their personalities tend to merge to where I've had to check whose pov a few times. For two handsome, super-fit, successful men they're both very unsure; which is both endearing and a little too much. The details of their busy lives is killing any tension, the sex scene has little oomph, when there should be stars.
Meep
is 39% done
Slow moving, a humble movie star and overworked martial artist. Quite sweet though the martial arts details are lost on me.
Price seems steep for the page count, but maybe that's me?
— Jun 13, 2019 02:57PM
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Price seems steep for the page count, but maybe that's me?
