Status Updates From Drowned Secrets

I love the cover, I like the characters + world, however, this debut reveals a passionate but inexperienced storyteller who would do well with a sage content editor + perfectionist beta reader who could have helped cut the fat off over explanatory narration/sometimes YA-ish dialogue making this an even more fitting read for it's target audience of D&D/Warhammer/Warcraft readers, like me. Hoping the 2nd half ramps up!