Status Updates From Shades of Twilight

It's definitely an odd and remote tone. All those 3rd POV are probably not helping. And there is really no romance in there, the MCs aren't spending any real time together, it's all miscommunication and rehashing assumptions in their heads ...

It's a bit of an odd tone ... probably the 3rd person POV coupled with the pretty remote characters. The first sex scene was repeated from Webb POV (3rd) after we lived it from Roanna POV ... I hate that, it's lazy, we should be able to get the other person feelings from one POV when a scene is written properly. I don't like to get the same scene twice from different POV.

Not for me