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immediately another issue!? at the end of one page Niko and Sage are in a hot spring talking there’s a page break and then it literally says Niko is “walking back into the room” to see Sage packing. sorry but they literally were just not in a room 2 seconds ago? no transition scene of them getting out of the springs? what is happening?

Sam told Niko in chapter 11 that May’s grandparents were petitioning for custody but he suddenly doesn’t seem to know that fact in chapter 15 when Sage brings it up? Even though Sage told him about helping Sam get a lawyer in ch 14 as well? Maybe Niko is just surprised it happened that weekend but it seemed like he was surprised by the whole situation. This book really should’ve had some more revisions.

40% in and I’m getting a little annoyed with bad editing. the grammar and all is fine but things keep getting repeated. Niko tells Sam how he used to play hockey and is leasing the restaurant in ch 7 and again in ch 8. both times Sam reacts as if this is new info. then he wonders how Niko has a nice car and money on an accountant salary, forgetting he was in the NHL and presumably sued for the faulty equipment.