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I’m not trying to be mean when I say this book is garbage and I don’t know how it got published

I genuinely cannot comprehend what this book is shooting for because all of the sex scenes are rushed a bit too much like to the point where it’ll just say “time went by” and that is totally fine if the whole point of this book is plot but it’s really not because when you write a professor / student book there tends to be a lot of sex scenes and tension because that’s how that relationship starts

Oh yea no you can 100% tell this was written in 2004 good god

“The rest was a blur of heated kisses and touches, and so much skin.”

I don’t care how short the book is that’s just bad writing like genuinely no excuse for that don’t write a sex scene if you’re not capable or willing to actually write one

“You hadn’t seen him in fifteen years.”

“Haven’t”
Like I’m genuinely wondering if she had an editor

My bad this book did in fact come out in 2014 but still honestly no excuses like I fear this is just common sense I truly hope that this author‘s most recent books are more well written

BE SO GODDAMN SERIOUS! I
This is your first time EVER having sex with a man and there is not a single drop of lube??? Are we literally joking?? Don’t piss me off. I’ve read books that were written in 2013 and the time of the book was set in the 1800s and they managed to use some form of lubricant so be so incredibly serious when you write this in 2021 and decide to forgo any form of lubrication

Okay, don’t piss me off because if you genuinely have no experience or background or education on how MM sex works don’t write it and honestly in this day and age you have no excuse because first off you didn’t have to write it and since you did decide to write it you should’ve been doing the upmost research to make sure you were not uneducated and misinformed before writing this

Too many of the books I’ve been reading lately have assigned a colour to a man’s penis I have had purple and red both don’t make sense I mean like you can describe the tip as red or purple maybe but that clarification is not made meaning this man’s whole penis is red I feel like we could’ve used another colour to describe it

“Some identifiable time later, Sean opened his eyes again and found himself lying in bed. Naked.”

I have never and I mean never read such patchy writing in a sense where this does not make sense like in no shape or form does this transition work or classify as good writing

If you are going to write a sex scene or anything similar make sure you are capable of writing one and also the logistics because in no world does it make sense for two dicks to just end up in his hands without anything in between them kissing and the dicks in hand