Status Updates From Captive

Nice erotic story. Although the ending. Haha

Are you effing kidding me? The whole thing was an effing <spoiler>!? I didn't know it was possible for this story to make me more ragey than I already was. Clearly I spoke too soon.</spoiler>

Really!? That's what speaker phone is for, you halfwit.

I'm sorry, but I refuse to believe that a man that pistol whips you and calls you a woman is the same man that you'd WANT kissing you. Ugh.

Correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't the reactions to fear fight or flight, not fight or flight or fuck?! This story is all kinds of unbelievable.

Is this story going somewhere? We've already been at this point four times. Let's get er done, pls. There are only 18 pages left.

I am loving how much these two hate each other because I know it'll be soooo good when they stop.

The writing on the sentence level is fine, but the story overall is cringingly bad so far. Character motivations are superimposed by the author to deliver a captive fantasy so far from realistic that I'm wincing and rolling my eyes every two or three sentences. I'll probably stick it out though because all the reviews said there's a twist at the end and I'm curious.

Twisted