Status Updates From 24 Bones

There's a bit of telling and not showing for the reader's sake.

Please do not refer to women as "female".

So far so good.
I was a little thrown off on Chapter 3 when suddenly it's mentioning computer. The first couple of chapters had me convinced it was set hundreds of years ago tehe

This is so freaking dry. Interesting things are happening, but the delivery is just so bland at times.

Slow, and I'm not sure why any of this is important.

Please let this one be decent...I'm hesitant given that it seems to have been removed from Amazon. (not a good sign usually...)