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St Nicholas day 2025 from Mark

Not what I expected. Feeling sad and forlorn with my MC here in the first 30 pages.


Descriptions falling flat - comparing twinkling eyes to puddles in the moonlight

Obscure words "multifarious" and "quotidian"

I didn't expect this book to go as it has so far (first 30 pages). I am currently feeling sad and hopeless.

Entering the midnight library the descriptions feel clinical/flat... I feel like they are meant to sound poetic but fail.
" the floor was lights down somewhere between light yellow and camel brown like the color of an old page".
Or " eyes came alive, twinkling like puddles in moonlight"