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getting a whole lot better. characters are fleshed out more, but PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF ALL THINGS HOLY let them develop and interact with each other without being interrupted by screams or the monster.

finally it’s going somewhere

some domestic bencutio 1920s shanghai AU right here. closest thing to romance in the book so far

27% in and the lengthy exposition is STILL coming, so much for Shakespearean pacing

definitely see the criticism that this book is over-designed

the way that “Pixieboy” is sorta implied to be a slur and yet everyone keeps using it like it’s nothing

someone please direct Kal to the SJM books a few shelves down. i think he got lost

finally some zila characterization

it’s really not much of a plot twist if you leave out all of the information needed for the reader to predict it. it’s just unfair and lazy

oh no not dialogue being described as a purr. this really is an sjm book but in ✨space✨

why do everyone’s solutions to any given problem always include seduction?

i’m honestly torn between whether it’d be better or worse to let the characters use actual swears or not. on the one hand, it would make them sound like actual people. on the other, it’d emphasize just how crude the writing is in it’s attempt to be, i guess funny?

I haven’t seen a character so offended by being correctly called a “liability” since one Clary Fairchild back in 2008.

every character is chronically unfunny. and the narrative seems to know it’s jokes are bad and yet the quips aren’t improving?

this is just riverdale (derogatory) but in ✨space✨

please curb your corset stereotypes