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I didn’t expect Scarlett to be deaths maiden! And alluding to the third sister being dead! Sorin is the first mmc that I’ve enjoyed in a long time. The book gets tripped up sometimes trying to sound edgy, but overall the mood and writing is great. And she’s fully fae. Id guess her mom is the queen of the west. I feel like we haven’t started our “journey” yet, so I’m chomping at the bit for that.

Okayyy things are getting heated. She’s unknowingly reading a book in a different language. Her mother’s ring is a fae artifact. Ryker is a fae known as Sorin, and tied to the same court she blames for her mother’s death. I think a spell what put on her by the silver fae in her most recent dream. I’m wagering my guesses were pretty spot on :p

So I’m going to make a few guesses. She is death incarnate and in some way magical. He is fae. Her mother’s ring is of fae origin and hides her power, same for the tonic she drinks every night. Either Cassius or Mikale are involved in her mother’s death. Ryker probably knew her mother in some semi close way. I’m enjoying it so far :) I love a strong lady that isn’t annoying

Overall I’m really enjoying this. Good pacing, fun characters, clearly given motives. It’s refreshing. A little pet peeve, His breath was hot against her ear as he whispered in that imperceptible whisper”. Sentences reusing the same word multiple times feel clunky, and there are a small handful. But overall I have no complaint about the story itself. I’m very excited

Ah I see. We spent maybe 5 pages for the entire journey of the first ingredient in the haunted area. And then 7 pages of them just sitting in the inn bedroom. I think 15 at the inn overall. I understand focusing the character relationship. But even that feels kind of unfocused. I think I could tell you this authors favorite romantasy books, but she’s just trying to cram them all in without and emotional buildup :(

I’m very surprised how quickly she’s done a 180 on her feelings for him. I’m curious, with so much potential plot moving so quickly, where does this book intend to spend its time?

So far the book is fun. I like the writing well enough, thought it can be a bit clunky. I do feel like some things are being rushed along, and because of that have less impact. For example, her semi-healing a 200 year old beings self hatred by repeating what many people have told him since “the incident”, aka “you were young, that’s not you anymore”. And her feelings towards him developing sooo quickly

Page 39. We’ve met the time god kid. He’s immediately told them every detail of the spell necklace. Of course they need the voidtome. She still thinks Rei planned this despite his obvious hate of sirens. The banter is SO BAD. Ughhraggsgaahhh I hate this

Also I completely glossed over this but. The collar goes on, magic stuff, she sees his memories and is inexplicably drawn to him. Then goes “Huh, I know the metal race can enchant stuff, too bad there’s absolutely no way to know what he was trying to enchant this with”

“It took every ounce of my restraint to bite my tongue and not tell him I found him in no way handsome. Fuck his pretty face and stupid soft-looking hair. And those dimples I might have liked if he didn't hold so much arrogance in his eyes“ bro kill me. Author is going for banter and landing in insufferable.

GIRL. He has clearly and verifiably proven he’s here to help. She’s still fighting. And suddenly there’s an explosion and weapons flying around in the room! “Nameless asshole” like 6 times in 2 pages. Again IM NOT EVEN 5% OF THE WAY IN. ITS PAGE 27.

Again. The sexy guy is trying to save her. Repeatedly. Has explained this. And she just? Randomly attacks him again? And sprints off only to hold a pillow as a weapon. She calls herself desperate to escape. But she’s such an idiot.

So because sexy guy randomly reappeared and shoved the metal dude during a chant, she’s know like soul bound (?) to him instead of the other guy. I feel like that shouldn’t be how interrupting a spell works. There should NOT be this many critics so early in a book

So in 4 pages we’ve met the metal guy, loved him, he threatened everyone, then betrayed her. Bro take a fucking breath

Oh course. A race looked down upon at an all human ball can use metal magic, threaten multiple guards, use the threat of ALL the metal in the room, to ask to talk to the siren. And this is not suspicious. Also “until the mysterious hero known as the time breaker came along…” bro. So heavy handed

Ugh. She goes to attack the guy apparently coming to save her. Misses, hits and old woman. Says “fuck off to mourner hell”, a different race dude comes in to help. Immediately starts talking about the mourner race and using “mourner hell” as a phrase. The would-be savior has disappeared. She’s an idiot. And I’d bet my life he’s one of the reclusive mourners no one’s seen in years. Pity.

I’m 2% of the way through and all I can think is it’s incredibly rushed. She’s waiting for this code phrase. Gets pushed into a fountain by a sexy man who tells her to go along with it, and she is completely oblivious that this might be the contact. Also the “Mister Unnamed Asshole! Hurumph” is a bad sign for me. Same with the heavy handed dropping of the infinitely powerful “voidtome” only she can find

Okay it’s weird that they keep referencing how YOUNG and BABY and LITTLE she is right??? Like you’ve reminded me that age of consent in this world is 16, but you’re still being so creepy. Especially when it’s being hinted that the bargainer fell in love with her back then. Like okay?? He’s a pedo then. Going after a 15-16 year old

Oh my god this book is so cringe I’m crying. I’m gonna try to finish it but I’ll literally caving in on myself with every page turned 💀